Talk:Jake the Dog (Adventure Time episode)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Seabuckthorn (talk · contribs) 01:55, 8 January 2014 (UTC)
Nominator: Gen. Quon (Talk)

Hi! I'll be reviewing this article for GA status, and should have my full review up shortly. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 01:55, 8 January 2014 (UTC)

1: Well-written

• a. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors: .
• b. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:

WP:LEAD:

Check for WP:LEAD: Check for Correct Structure of Lead Section:  Done Check for Citations (WP:LEADCITE):  Done Check for Introductory text:  Done Check for Provide an accessible overview (MOS:INTRO):  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (not a concise summary of the Plot section, must be more clear and concise.) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (not a concise summary of the Production section, few important points like the music composer Tim Kiefer are not in the lead.) Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (not a concise summary of the Reception section) Check for Relative emphasis:  Done Major Point 1: Plot "The series follows the adventures of Finn ... Thus, the world is righted again." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 2: Production "The episode was written and ... Cloris Leachman as Farmworld Marceline." (the lead gives due weight as is given in the body) Major Point 3: Reception ""Jake the Dog" was watched by 3.435 million viewers and received largely positive critical acclaim, with many critics writing that the episode was both humorous and a creative challenge." (the lead does not give due weight as is given in the body) Check for Opening paragraph (MOS:BEGIN):  Done Check for First sentence (WP:LEADSENTENCE):  Done "Jake the Dog" is the second episode of the fifth season of the American animated television series Adventure Time. Check for Format of the first sentence (MOS:BOLDTITLE):  Done Check for Proper names and titles:  Done Check for Abbreviations and synonyms (MOS:BOLDSYN): None Check for Foreign language (MOS:FORLANG): None Check for Pronunciation: None Check for Contextual links (MOS:CONTEXTLINK):  Done Check for Biographies: NA Check for Organisms: NA Check for Biographies of living persons: NA Check for Alternative names (MOS:LEADALT):  Done Check for Non-English titles: Check for Usage in first sentence: Check for Separate section usage: Check for Length (WP:LEADLENGTH):  Done Check for Clutter (WP:LEADCLUTTER): None

WP:LAYOUT:

Done Check for WP:LAYOUT:  Done Check for Body sections: WP:BODY, MOS:BODY.  Done Check for Headings and sections:  Done Check for Section templates and summary style:  Done Check for Paragraphs (MOS:PARAGRAPHS):  Done Paragraphs should be short enough to be readable, but long enough to develop an idea. (WP:BETTER) Fix ""Jake the Dog" first aired on Cartoon Network ... "Finn the Human". the episode ... at the time of the airing." in the Reception section. There is also a 1a issue: the should be The. Check for Standard appendices and footers (MOS:APPENDIX):  Done Check for Order of sections (WP:ORDER):  Done Check for Works or publications:  Done Check for See also section (MOS:SEEALSO): None Check for Notes and references (WP:FNNR):  Done Check for Further reading (WP:FURTHER): None Check for External links (WP:LAYOUTEL): None Check for Links to sister projects: None Check for Navigation templates:  Done Check for Formatting:  Done Check for Images (WP:LAYIM):  Done Check for Links:  Done Check for Horizontal rule (WP:LINE):  Done

WP:WTW:

Done Check for WP:WTW:  Done Check for Words that may introduce bias:  Done Check for Puffery (WP:PEA):  Done Check for Contentious labels (WP:LABEL):  Done Check for Unsupported attributions (WP:WEASEL):  Done Check for Expressions of doubt (WP:ALLEGED):  Done Check for Editorializing (MOS:OPED):  Done Check for Synonyms for said (WP:SAY):  Done Check for Expressions that lack precision:  Done Check for Euphemisms (WP:EUPHEMISM):  Done Check for Clichés and idioms (WP:IDIOM):  Done Check for Relative time references (WP:REALTIME):  Done Check for Neologisms (WP:PEA): None Check for Offensive material (WP:F***): None Check for WP:MOSFICT:  Done Check for Real-world perspective (WP:Real world):  Done Check for Primary and secondary information (WP:PASI):  Done Check for Contextual presentation (MOS:PLOT):  Done

WP:EMBED:
None Prose is preferred over list (WP:PROSE): Check for Tables (MOS:TABLES):

2: Verifiable with no original research

• a. Has an appropriate reference section: Yes
• b. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:

WP:RS:

Done Check for WP:RS:  Done Check for the material (WP:RSVETTING): (not contentious)  Done Is it contentious?: No Does the ref indeed support the material?: Check for the author (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Who is the author?: Seibert, Fred (Frederator Studios) Sava, Oliver (The Onion) Larry Leichliter (Cartoon Network) Adventure Time production staff (Tumblr) Stopera, Dave (BuzzFeed) Moynihan, Jesse (JesseMoynihan.com) Kiefer, Tim (NastySonix) Bibel, Sara (Zap2it) Kohn, Eric (Snagfilms) Does the author have a Wikipedia article?: What are the author's academic credentials and professional experience?: What else has the author published?: Is the author, or this work, cited in other reliable sources? In academic works?: Check for the publication (WP:RSVETTING):  Done Frederator Studios The Onion Cartoon Network Tumblr BuzzFeed JesseMoynihan.com by Jesse Moynihan NastySonix Zap2it Snagfilms Check for Self-published sources (WP:SPS):

WP:MINREF:

Done Check for inline citations WP:MINREF:  Done Check for Direct quotations:  Done "inter-dimensional travel" ... [8] (Check on source 8, successful, "Given all the inter-dimensional travel in the episode, ...") "I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale 'Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil' on my turntables and went wild – pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more – transforming Jake’s 'Lil’ Booty Dance' bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration."[8] (Check on source 8, successful, "... I threw my own music from the Season 2 finale “Mortal Folly / Mortal Recoil" on my turntables and went wild - pitching, reversing, rewinding, scratching and more - transforming Jake’s "Lil’ Booty Dance" bongo song into a booming, merry-go-round dance celebration.") "a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series."[3] (Check on source 3, successful, "... and the result is a dense première that evokes nearly all aspects of this series.") "on humor and relationships" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, "The Dog is more focused on humor and relationships, ...") "irreverent silly note[s]" ... [3] (Check on source 3, successful, " Jake says, ending the episode on an irreverent silly note after an intense story.") "irreverent and narratively engaging".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... more clearly represents the progress of the medium: Irreverent and narratively engaging, ...") "the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions."[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... it's the ideal testament to animation's glorious pliability in an commercial arena otherwise defined by restrictions.") "sad subtext" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "... toys with an incredibly sad subtext: The world has been destroyed in something called The Great Mushroom War.") "deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites" ... [10] (Check on source 10, successful, "Through friendship and playtime, the characters seemingly deny the bad vibes their surrounding world invites.") "cheery songs and vibrant artwork" were some of the series strongest points.[10] (Check on source 10, successful, "The cheery songs and vibrant artwork remain sincere while challenging the backdrop at the same time.") "interesting creative challenge".[10] (Check on source 10, successful, " provided an interesting creative challenge for Ward and his team: a prolonged running time of half an hour, which basically amounted to a double episode.") Check for Likely to be challenged:  Done Check for Contentious material about living persons (WP:BLP): NA

• c. No original research:  Done

WP:NOR:
Done Check for primary sources (WP:PRIMARY):  Done Check for synthesis (WP:SYN):  Done Check for original images (WP:OI):  Done

3: Broad in its coverage

a. Major aspects:

Done Check for Article scope as defined by reliable sources: Check for The extent of the subject matter in these RS: Check for Out of scope: Check for The range of material that belongs in the article: Check for All material that is notable is covered: Check for All material that is referenced is covered: Check for All material that a reader would be likely to agree matches the specified scope is covered: Check for The most general scope that summarises essentially all knowledge: Check for Stay on topic and no wandering off-topic (WP:OFFTOPIC):

b. Focused:
Done Check for Readability issues (WP:LENGTH): Check for Article size (WP:TOO LONG!):

4: Neutral

WP:NPOV:

Done 4. Fair representation without bias:  Done Check for POV (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for naming (WP:POVNAMING):  Done Check for structure (WP:STRUCTURE):  Done Check for Due and undue weight (WP:DUE):  Done Check for Balancing aspects (WP:BALASPS):  Done Check for Giving "equal validity" (WP:VALID):  Done Check for Balance (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Impartial tone (WP:IMPARTIAL):  Done Check for Describing aesthetic opinions (WP:SUBJECTIVE):  Done Check for Words to watch (WP:YESPOV):  Done Check for Attributing and specifying biased statements (WP:ATTRIBUTEPOV):  Done Check for Fringe theories and pseudoscience (WP:PSCI): None Check for Religion (WP:RNPOV): None

5: Stable: No edit wars, etc: Yes

6: Images  Done (Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license)

Images:

Done 6: Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  Done Check for copyright tags (WP:TAGS):  Done Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): This file is licensed under the Creative Commons Attribution-Share Alike 3.0 Unported license. This version permits free use, including commercial use. Hence this image complies with The license must permit both commercial reuse and derivative works. Check for copyright status:  Done Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Free. Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Free. Check for non-free content (WP:NFC): None Check for valid fair use rationales (WP:FUR): NA 6: Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  Done Check for image relevance (WP:IMAGE RELEVANCE):  Done Image 1 (ClorisLeachmanJune09.jpg): Relevant. Image 2 (M Emmet Walsh at the 2009 Tribeca Film Festival.jpg): Relevant. Check for Images for the lead (WP:LEADIMAGE): None Check for suitable captions (WP:CAPTION):  Done Caption: "The episode guest starred Cloris Leachman (left) and M. Emmet Walsh (right) among others." succinct and informative

As per the above checklist, the issues identified are:

• The lead does not provide an accessible overview. Major Points like the Plot, the Production and the Reception are not the concise summaries of their respective sections.
• The lead does not give relative emphasis to the Reception as is given in the body.
• Paragraphs should be long enough to develop an idea. Fix short paragraphs.

This article is a very promising GA nominee. I'm glad to see your work here. I'm putting the article on hold. All the best! --Seabuckthorn ♥ 14:42, 10 January 2014 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. How do these changes look?--Gen. Quon (Talk) 02:13, 11 January 2014 (UTC)

It's concise and good now.

OK, everything looks good now. Passing the article to GA status. --Seabuckthorn ♥ 02:50, 11 January 2014 (UTC)