Talk:Jacqui McQueen

Sources

[1][2][3][4]RAIN*the*ONE ^BAM 05:03, 5 March 2011 (UTC)

• Original- [5] Archived - [6]Rain the 1 ^BAM 23:23, 13 April 2011 (UTC)
• [7]Rain the 1 ^BAM 22:11, 10 May 2011 (UTC)

• [8] - Jaci on Jacqui and Emily.Rain the 1 ^BAM 15:42, 15 May 2011 (UTC)

• [9] - What's on TV Interview
• [10] - OK! Magazine interview - Andy and Claire
• [11] - Elizabeth Henstridge on the Kidney storylineRain the 1 ^BAM 01:38, 25 May 2011 (UTC)
• 2009 ISA nom D4nnyw14 (talk) 21:11, 1 December 2011 (UTC)

• EaringsD4nnyw14 (talk) 22:48, 28 August 2011 (UTC)

• [12] - Rhys owes JacquiRaintheOne ^BAM 11:12, 30 September 2011 (UTC)

• [13]RaintheOne ^BAM 01:51, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
• [14] - ResearchRain the 1 05:43, 7 January 2012 (UTC)
• [15] - ReceptionRain the 1 01:43, 24 January 2012 (UTC)
• [16] - What's on TV InterviewRain the 1 02:34, 24 January 2012 (UTC)
• [17] - ReceptionRain the 1 00:27, 28 April 2012 (UTC)
• Reception - JuneGloom Talk 00:19, 23 February 2013 (UTC)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Jacqui McQueen/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

I'll review this article shortly. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:24, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

Here are the issues I found:

• "marrying illegal immigrant Aleksander Malota to pay of debts," pay off debts Done
• "her wayward relationship with Tony Hutchinson, which became popular with viewers" and her wayward Done
• "weather Gilly is guilty or innocent is to be decided by viewers" whether Done
• Sentences starting with "in (year)", with a month if applicable, should have commas after year Done
• "The relationship proved popular with viewers,[3] during an interview" period/semicolon instead of comma Done
• "Danny takes a shine to Jacqui and they share a couple of dates, during an interview" same as above, because they are two complete thoughts Done
• "Although she knows the risks of crossing Danny, she tries to fix the poker game, of this Cooper" semicolon for second one, as above Done
• "It was later revealed that the deatils" details Done
• The storyline section feels too long, and I request that it be trimmed. What should be I'll leave up to you, since you would know which pieces are more important than others. Done
• The sentencing at the start of the reception section feels overly repetitive. Not sure how to mix it up, but any way that could be found would be beneficial. Done
• "Virgin Media criticised the character's dress sense stating " add by or put a comma after sense Done

I'll put the article on hold, and once the issues are fixed I'll read through the storyline section for any errors. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 05:34, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Comment - Only just noticed this, I'll get to it.RAIN*the*ONE ^BAM 14:50, 14 March 2011 (UTC)

Okay, looks good; will read through storyline section tonight and note final comments here. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:24, 14 March 2011 (UTC)

Yeah I tried to cut it down as much as, she's always had big stories.RAIN*the*ONE ^BAM 04:14, 15 March 2011 (UTC)

Here are the remaining issues:

• "Jacqui meets divorcee Tony, they sleep together." then they Done
• "Becca is killed by another prisoner, Jacqui is devastated." and Jacqui is Done
• "Jacqui discovers she is pregnant, Tony initially doesn't" semicolon rather than comma Done
• "Jacqui's plans to adopt because of her criminal record." Jacqui plans to Done
• "Jacqui forces Tony to make a choice between Harry, or her." no comma needed Done
• "Jacqui and Tony separate, she realises she needs to forgive Myra." and she realises Done
• "her lies and stealing fro the school canteen." from the Done
• "Jacqui and Rhys unknowingly meet on a internet dating website, fall for each other." and fall for Done

Once those issues are fixed i'll pass the article.

I've done them. :)RAIN*the*ONE ^BAM 14:31, 16 March 2011 (UTC)

Article looks good now, so it can finally be passed as a GA. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 16:05, 16 March 2011 (UTC)

'Lost her identity' - unsourced comment

The comment, supposedly from Claire Cooper, that Jacqui 'lost her identity' during Lucy Allan's tenure is unsourced - unless a source can be added it should be removed, as we have no way of knowing if Cooper actually said it. Smurfmeister (talk) 01:51, 20 May 2013 (UTC)