Talk:Jacqueline Pearce/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Edwininlondon in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Edwininlondon (talk · contribs) 12:38, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Happy to review this. At first glance this seems to meet the GA requirements. I will do full review as soon as possible. Edwininlondon (talk) 12:38, 7 January 2022 (UTC) Some general comments:Reply

  • sci-fi fans." should be sci-fi fans". as per MOS:INOROUT
  • Pearce spent five years working at the Vervet Monkey Foundation --> perhaps add in which country this is
  • The text says she was born in Woking, Surrey, but the infobox has Byfleet
  • She same year, she flew --> In
  • the BBC dramatisation --> link BBC (and delink it further on)
  • softness and predatoriness." --> softness and predatoriness".
  • cited by Steven Duckworth as --> a bit of an intro is needed, as to why we should trust his judgment (e.g. critic? journalist? art professor?)
  • the show's primary villain." --> villain".
  • original Blakes 7 cast members --> original Blake's 7 cast members
  • to recover from Servalan." --> ".
  • The Aberdeen Press and Journal reviewer --> The Aberdeen Press and Journal reviewer
  • wrote that in his Who Dares Wins: Britain, 1979–1982 (2019) that --> delete the first that
  • believes that there is a similarity --> a bit odd that this is present tense
  • Amended to "drew a parallell". BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 18:10, 10 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • flaunt [their] femininity."
  • for a generation of sci-fi fans."
  • the Hollywood link should probably point to Cinema of the United States
  • serial The Two Doctors --> maybe add the year
  • Pearce returned to Doctor Who in 2015, this time opposite Hurt, as a regular in the Big Finish audio series based on the adventures of the War Doctor portraying Cardinal Ollistra, a leader of the Time Lords in the Time War[27] --> missing full stop and possibly a comma after War Doctor
  • her command."
  • alongside Dr Who --> alongside Doctor Who
  • her fellow Blake's 7 actor --> her fellow Blake's 7 actor
  • in South Africa --> the rule is not to link to countries MOS:OVERLINK
  • disillusionment."
  • Pearce's second marriage also ended in divorce --> to whom and when? Plus not mentioned in infobox
  • in the Filmography there is another case of Blakes 7

I'll look at the sources tomorrow. Edwininlondon (talk) 23:15, 7 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Sources:

  • Quotations always need a source, even in the lead, so "a sexual awakening for a generation of sci-fi fans."[9]
  • Sources all appear reliable
  • Muir, John Kenneth, A History and Critical Analysis of Blake's 7, the 1978–1981 British Television Space Adventure --> is this a book? article?
  • Carter, Meg. "Return of '70s Seven". The Times. p. 36. --> date?
  • 33 needs a publisher, isbn and a page number for the quote, and 34 is the same?
Amended. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 14 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
  • 32 is the Times obit again, same as 9
  • source 11 needs page numbers
  • 21 the text actually says "exploit" and not "flaunt [their] femininity"
  • 25 does back up the Dr Who claims but not "As well as appearing in the BBC children's programmes Dark Season (alongside Kate Winslet) and Moondial, "
  • In the filmography it says "1964 A Question of Happiness Frances 2 episodes: "Fred" and "Watch me I'm a bird" but source 5 says Fred Frances 1964.
  • Spotcheck: 1 2 24 36 39 all fine

The other criteria all appear to be met. Edwininlondon (talk) 11:10, 8 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

@BennyOnTheLoose:Not sure if you noticed I reviewed your nomination, so just pinging you. Do you have time to work on this? Edwininlondon (talk) 16:11, 10 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks, Edwininlondon. Hopefully I've covered off everything from your review. Let me know if anything else is required. Regards, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 23:37, 14 January 2022 (UTC)Reply
I believe this article now meets all GA criteria. Nice work. Edwininlondon (talk) 09:37, 15 January 2022 (UTC)Reply