Hey, writing just to let you know that I’ve seen your suggestion about the strike and budget cuts, but I won’t be able to be able to edit as I’m traveling on the road right now. I’ll probably get to it once I get to my destination in a couple of hours. reppoptalk18:27, 28 June 2024 (UTC)Reply
Reads better if you write "After her 1999 election to the State Assembly,"
Added.
Upon further reading I think this should say 2000"?
Switched.
Not clear how this relates to her given she was on the council for six years? I think this quote is just too out of context and paraphrasing should be used instead. "invested funds in Hollywood that were invested nowhere else in the city for the past 15 years."
I've done some work on that sentence.
I think it is still unclear. Basically, "invested nowhere else in the city" does this mean they continued to invest the funds that were already invested in Hollywood for the past 15 years? How is that revitalization? Or does it mean there were funds that were just not invested anywhere and they invested them in Hollywood? Or does it mean the level of investment was beyond anywhere in the city ?
I've added some more context for how Hollywood needed it (the 1994 earthquake) and howlshe helped with the area afterwards.
This is worlds better. Good job.
"She and Christine Kehoe joined incumbent assemblymembers Sheila Kuehl and Carole Migden as the only openly gay members of the state assembly. " "Only" is quite a stretch of an adjective to describe a group of 4. I suggest reordering this paragraph to "get to the punchline" first. Basically, "she was a founding member of the California Legislative LGBTQ Caucus in June 2002".
Changed to what you suggested.
" In the general election, she defeated him, with her victory contributing to a liberal majority on the board, alongside Larry Gonzalez." Is it a three person board? The alongside Gonzalez is not clear here.
Added that its a four person majority that Goldberg achieved with Gonzalez.
I added "simultaneous " to explain the relation between Goldberg and Gonzalez.
2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
Looks good overall
FN 13 News-Pilot is a newspaper without the location in the title so it needs the location added.
Added location.
2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
Reliable sources looks good. Spot Checks:
"Goldberg took a leading role and led the initial talks with the University of California administration to peacefully resolve the police car blockade before being replaced as the spokesperson by Mario Savio." - Verified. The sources are a bit odd but still RS so that is not a problem for GA.
" She was arrested during a nonviolent demonstration, which subsequently prevented her from securing a job within the Los Angeles Unified School District...she became a teacher in the Compton Unified School District" - Verified
"During her tenure, the board implemented a year-round schedule to alleviate overcrowding in schools and established a program to give greater authority to the community, including teachers and parents" -- Verified
"However, board member Rita Walters cast the lone vote against Goldberg's election, expressing concern that Goldberg's election was from the board's preference for teachers over administrators." -- Verified
"In November 1990, Goldberg announced her retirement from the board and her intention to return to her career as a high school teacher." --Verified, I think the ref for FN 15 should be move one sentence up.
Moved it up to that sentence.
"Goldberg being more liberal and endorsed by high-profile Democrats such as Gloria Molina" - I think this summary is problematic. I wouldn't go so far as to say it is unverified, but the source indicates significant other concerns than liberal/conservative. Primarily, Goldberg seemed to be more on the identity politics (race and sexual orientation) and LaBonge running a practical "fix the pot holes" campaign. Potentially, the low primary turn out is also worth noting. I am not sure how that turn out compared to other years or the general election.
I've tried to re-summarize it without the "liberal" and "conservative" aspects, I don't know if its good enough. I used the L.A. times article for the reference. Low turnout is basically a staple of LA politics, especially since it was off-year elections until recently.
I commented below on the nature of "diverse". I think another issue here is that some one who is not well informed about LA in the 90's does not understand why LaBonge would focus on areas outside Hollywood. It seems to me like the economic class is a necessary explanation here. FYI I know very little about LA.
The Times article directly states that areas outside Hollywood had more "conservative, Anglo homeowners who are also considered more likely to support Riordan for mayor" (Riordan being a fairly conservative candidate in terms of Los Angeles politics). Would you want me to add that?
Yes
Added.
"During the campaign, Portillo accused Goldberg's campaign of spreading rumors about his arrest nine years earlier by an undercover policeman in a whispering campaign, and publicly disclosed this information to address the allegations. However, Goldberg's campaign denied these claims" - Verified
"deciding against pursuing an appointment process" -- verified
"She clarified that she intended to serve only the remainder of his term if appointed but expressed the possibility of running in a special election if she were not appointed." -- verified; however FN50 covers a notable desire in her district for latino representation and Goldberg's response with endorsement from latino leaders. I think this should be covered. FN51 could also be cited for the fact quoted.
Added more context.
"In August 2023, Goldberg announced that she would be retiring from the board in 2024 and stepping away from electoral politics" -- verified
"As president, she focused on making meetings understandable and accessible to the public, explaining how the board conducted its business, and ensuring that meetings and public comments started on time" -- verified
The section "LAUSD Board of Education" does not talk about her 2019 and later service ?
I originally had it in the same section, but I later placed it in a separate section to make it in order. Do you suggest me to place it back in "LAUSD Board of Education" or rename "Retirement and return to politics" to include the LAUSD?
A bit of both, put most of the detail in the LAUSD section and in the return just summarize what was already said
This doesn't really help me know what you want, do you want me to put it all in "LAUSD Board of Education"?
Yes, and then the retirement might require some more editing.
I moved it and put the retirement in "Personal life", although I could always move it back to a section (or do it after she re-retires by November)
"Goldberg being more liberal and LaBonge being more conservative in the race." Is there really nothing more notable to say about the differences in their campaigns?
Added more context.
I think "diverse" is unclear here. A reasonable reader will wonder: are they economically diverse, geographically, ethnically or some combination of those?
Added the word "ethnically" as its how it was described in the L.A. Times article.
On the city council for six years and there are only two sentences of notable information? A lot happened in LA in the 90's I suspect there is more to say.
I'll have to come back to this tomorrow.
I think this is significantly improved. Are you planning on adding more? I think it potentially could still be expanded
I mostly based it around various summaries of Goldberg's career and it seems that her help in Hollywood, education accomplishments, and the living wage were the three major things that she was known for. I could always expand the education bit if I can find more sources if you'd like.
I don't think this needs much more. One question I am left with: she got some criticism on the couples benefits due to budgetary concerns. id she do anything to alleviate the budgetary concerns?
I searched through newspaper archives, and I added a sentence that states people praising it and proponents saying that the cost was minimal.
Did she have any role in the election to fill her spot on the city council? If her brother is was running I would except she had some notable stance about that.
I'll have to come back to this tomorrow.
I looked through a bunch of newspaper sources and they don't seem to mention that Goldberg did anything for her brother during the election.
What about FN41?
That's about the assembly race, and mostly about Christine Chavez (the "family ties" being her relation to Cesar Chavez).
"Goldberg's campaign was using his arrest" - what does 'using' mean here ?
Added more context.
"bill for textbooks favored by teachers" what does this mean? Funds to buy the textbooks? Giving teachers more say in which textbooks are bought? Is it a non-binding resolution?
Added more context for what it is.
"After she termed out, she was succeeded by labor organize" did she have a notable role in this election?
I added the candidate who was defeated by de Leon that Goldberg endorsed.
"Despite this, Goldberg defeated Martinez Duran and was re-elected to a second term" - earlier she said she only wanted one term I would think some explanation of the change is notable?
Earlier, it said that she would serve the remainder of the term if she was appointed. I've added more context to say that she was open to running in elections if there wasn't an appointment.
"she focused on making meetings understandable and accessible to the public" what does focused mean? Does it mean she said she was focused on that or that she actually did something?
Added more on what she did, from the L.A. Times article on what she did as board president.
In some final checks on coverage, I found that Goldberg was on the board during some budget cuts and a teacher's strike. Here is the source I used, but feel free to use better ones. Do you think this is sufficiently notable to add some coverage? I lean yes.
3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
"Goldberg faced opposition from Manhattan Beach businessman Bill Bloomfield" - is the source of the attacks against her notable?
Added more context.
For electoral results, the swing column seems like it will just confuse readers and holds very little information.
Similar thing for the position column, if she won does that not mean she had first position?
I really only copied what was on other pages (eg. Kevin Kiley (politician) and John Duarte (politician)). Los Angeles elections have multiple candidates and some can finish 5th, 10th, 15th, but you can be second and be able to advance to the primary and get first, this goes for getting first in the primary and placing second in the runoff. The swing is there for the partisan elections (even if she was in a heavily Democratic district).
Ok, I presume this article is of primary interest to LA residents who would be more familiar with this sort of thing. We do not have run off elections where I live.
4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
Excellent, here is one example "While in the City Council, Goldberg introduced a motion to extend health insurance coverage to unmarried domestic partners of city employees, a decision that drew criticism for its timing, given the city's ongoing budget deficit."
From FN6, potentially add some paraphrase of "But achievement remains low for many of low-income, immigrant or minority students--a fact Goldberg lists among her disappointments."
Added a sentence from that.
5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
Basically stable. There is some of what appears to be vandalism from IP users. As a due diligence for the review I would like to confirm a few things.
Is she a practicing Jew? Is this a notable part of her life? What mention need be made of this? For reference I thought the Trotsky page gave a good example of how to cover this for political figures that happen to be of Jewish decent but do not practice and Judaism does not play a major role in their life
I'll come back to this tomorrow.
I covered it because the LA Times article covered it. Most sources don't seem to mention it as a major thing, although this article says that she's a member of the Sholem Educational Institute community organization. Should I mention that?
No, but I commend your research. I think the article is fair on this point as is.
Double check the number of votes she got in the 2019 election
Checked and added another source for the primary.
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