Talk:J. Hartwell Harrison/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 13:03, 10 May 2020 (UTC)

Happy to take this one :) Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 13:03, 10 May 2020 (UTC)

@Sainsf:Thanks again—just FYI, out of town guests here for a long weekend, so I may be delayed in acting on this. Hoppyh (talk) 16:44, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

No problem, just keep me updated. Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 17:32, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

General checks

• No dablink, duplink, copyvio issues
• Sourcing and citations: no issues that I can see, just edited one ref parameter (publisher→newspaper). *Is Perspectives a source? Shouldn't it be in Further reading or something?

Used as a cite. Hoppyh (talk) 17:57, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Prose and coverage

• Link urologic on first mention in lead (it is linked to urology in para 2) and main text. A couple of links can be inserted here too "human organ removal for transplant to another".

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 18:06, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Harrison and the hospital’s urology team conducted its landmark transplant between identical twins in 1954. Won't it be better to put the details about the transplants together in the lead? Presently it is distributed in two paras.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 18:12, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Harrison was a descendant of the Harrison family of Virginia. Not sure if this is the right place, just after his death and at the end of the lead. Maybe 2nd para is a better choice.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 18:18, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• From left–Harrison, Merrill, Murray In this caption, a reader who has just started and has cast just a glance on the lead might be confused who Merrill and Murray are

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:37, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• bachelor of science may be linked to Bachelor of Science. Also note the case used. Maybe also link MD?

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:45, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Elliott Carr Cutler Professor of Surgery Was this a post of honour named after a renowned person? May be clarify this a bit.

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 19:55, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• and other medical issues A bit vague as "medical" refers to a broad field. May be add a few examples.

Done. No specifics included in sources. Hoppyh (talk) 19:58, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• He served as President of the Boston Surgical Society, Vice President of the American Surgical Association do we know for how long? From and to? Similarly from and to might be helpful for for eight years was a member of the Board of Visitors of the University of Virginia and Harrison was also a urologic consultant.

These are items where the sources have thus far failed me. Some luck today with a couple dates from the internet. Hoppyh (talk) 20:01, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Link kidney transplant and chronic nephritis (main text)

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 20:14, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Murray's Nobel Lecture Shouldn't it be "lecture"?

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 20:13, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• Purkinje Medal from Czechoslovakia You mean from an organization in the country? Could be more specific.

I linked the name to the probable related article, but no source for it. Hoppyh (talk) 20:20, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• He held honorary degrees In what?

Nothing in the refs. Hoppyh (talk) 20:20, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

• The work would need a ref probably as noted in the previous GA review, though the work itself should ideally be the source shouldn't it? We can insert a citation just to be sure

Done. Hoppyh (talk) 17:57, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

Wonderful article, as always :) Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 15:22, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

@Sainsf: All but a few addressed, as noted. Thanks again. Hoppyh (talk) 20:25, 14 May 2020 (UTC)

The changes look excellent. Ready for promotion :) Sainsf · (How ya doin'?) 03:45, 16 May 2020 (UTC)