Talk:Izumo-class cruiser/GA1
Latest comment: 9 years ago by Ian Rose in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Ian Rose (talk · contribs) 23:33, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
Will start on this shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 23:33, 20 May 2015 (UTC)
Toolbox check -- no dab or EL issues.
Structure/prose/detail -- let me know if any probs with my copyediting; other points:
- "Iwate served as the flagship for the divisional commander, Rear Admiral Misu Sotarō, and Izumo for the fleet commander, Vice Admiral Kamimura Hikonojō" -- This seems to imply that Izumo was also a flagship, is that what's meant? If so I'd be explicit about it, if not I'd rephrase to say exactly what her relationship was to Hikonojō.
- "Kamimura left Rurik to the tender administrations of his reinforcements" -- This almost sounds like "to the tender mercies", or do we in fact mean "administration by ships' tender(s)"?
Referencing -- couple of tweaks but basically formatting/reliability seems fine
Images -- US PD tag for File:Asama class 8 inch gun turret right elevation.jpg?
Summary -- just those three things above. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:23, 21 May 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. See if my changes are satisfactory.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:13, 22 May 2015 (UTC)