Talk:Iyengar Yoga/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

Will review. MWright96 (talk) 17:28, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

Many thanks, will respond promptly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:40, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

History

• "B. K. S. Iyengar began teaching gradually," - clarify what exactly Iyengar was teaching

Done.

• "The book has been described as the bible of modern yoga," - perhaps mention who described the boook as the bible of modern yoga

Done.

• "and has been translated into at least 23 languages.[9][1]" - refs in numerical order please

Done.

• Wikilink Pune

Done.

• "in Inner London Education Authority evening classes" - try to avoid a violation of WP:SEAOFBLUE by rewriting this section of text

Done.

• I believe the fifth paragraph in this section would be better off merged into the fourth paragraph in this section

Done.

Style

• "The style "emphasises precision and alignment"," - according to whom?

Attributed.

• "i.e. moving a little in the right direction" - slightly is more formal

Edited.

• "Postures are held for a relatively long period compared to other schools of yoga;" - clarify it is a long period of time

Done.

• "to enjoy the benefits of many asanas" - this sounds a little informal and might be better off to be made more formal if possible

Done

• "Postures are held for a relatively long period" - same query as the third one in this section

Done.

• "(such as Trikonasana and Virabhadrasana[18])," - the reference would be better off placed at the end of the comma

Done.

• Trikonasana should not be linked twice in close succession

Fixed.

• Delink Mary Dunn since she is already linked in the previous section

Done.

Training, certification, and standards

• "and updated its ethics standards (based on the Yamas and Niyamas in the Yoga Sutras of Patanjali)" - don't think the parentheses are appropriate here

Removed.

References

• Reference 4 should include the page number that states where the information is located

This is intentionally citing the whole book, to fit the context of that sentence.

• Reference 19 is missing the date it was published

Added.

• Reference 26 should mention the date it was published and the author who wrote the source

Added.

• References 27 & 28 should mention the date the sources were accessed

Added.

Overall the main issues are with the prose and some fields missing from a few of the references. On hold. MWright96 (talk) 18:32, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

MWright96 All done to date. Chiswick Chap (talk) 21:00, 22 March 2020 (UTC)

Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 06:32, 23 March 2020 (UTC)