Talk:In Bloom/GA1

GA Review

• The lead isn't the greatest... needs paragraph split, reorgnisation of information, etc. Like this one.

There's not as much information on his song as there is on "Smells Like Teen Spirit". One paragraph seems sufficient. I feel the lead hits all the basic points; aside from some tweaking I can't figure out to improve the lead. WesleyDodds (talk)`

That looks better, yeah. giggy _(:O) 08:33, 24 June 2008 (UTC)

• "The songs from these sessions were placed on a demo tape that circulated amongst the music industry, generating interest in the group among major record labels." - couldn't hurt to ref this

I thought I had, but apparently that wasn't the case. Fixed

• "Vig thought it would be good to start recording a song previously recorded at Smart Studios.."" - where does this quote open? (if there is one)

Fixed

• No reviewer comments in the Release and reception section?

Can't really find any. WesleyDodds (talk) 05:23, 24 June 2008 (UTC)

Here's an AMG review of the song. giggy _(:O) 08:33, 24 June 2008 (UTC)

I'm not sure about using that. it covers points largely already covere dby other sources in the article. In terms of reception, the sentence ""In Bloom"'s music owed more to standard-issue heavy rock than anything else on the album Nevermind; with its mid-tempo power chords and staggered tom-tom fills, it would have sounded perfectly natural blasting out of the tape deck in a rusted-out Camaro if not for Cobain's noisy, fractured guitar solo." is about the only one that seems worth quoting as critical commentary, but even then it's not a contemporary description and I'm not sure how well it'd fit in. WesleyDodds (talk) 08:58, 24 June 2008 (UTC)

Shrugs. It's not the biggest deal... if you ever feel like adding it in, go ahead, but don't lose sleep over it. giggy _(:O) 09:15, 24 June 2008 (UTC)

And leave me a note when done please... cheers, giggy _(:O) 04:40, 24 June 2008 (UTC)