Talk:Imelda Marcos/GA2

Latest comment: 8 years ago by FunkMonk in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: FunkMonk (talk · contribs) 18:51, 3 March 2016 (UTC)Reply

  • Hi, I'll review this article. FunkMonk (talk) 18:51, 3 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • First, add date and location for infobox image?
Done. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Imeldific (talkcontribs) 06:46, 17 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
  • She is categorised as being a Visayan, but the article only mentions Spanish descent. Seems something is missing, since she is clearly not only Spanish. Perhaps there could also be a link to Filipino people of Spanish ancestry.
  • "She briefly dated Benigno Aquino, Jr." When?
  • " Imee, Ferdinand Jr., aka Bongbong, and Irene, and an adopted girl named Aimee." Could we get birth dates?
  • There seem to be more images at Commons, none that can be used?[1]
  • What is her first language? Spanish or some native language?
  • "she was involved in altercations, including one with The Beatles[18] and another with Dovie Beams" Could these be elaborated?
  • "an assassination attempt against" What was the motive?
  • "She also organized the" and "She also initiated". Seems repetitive with two consecutive sentences beginning with "she also".
  • You need page numbers for books.
  • "member of the Interim Batasang Pambansa" You could explain what this is.
  • "US$51-million" Needs spacing, same with "US$60-million" and other places.
  • "Although she declined buying the Empire State Building because she felt it was "too ostentatious."[50][51]" I don't think you can say "although" there, but not sure.
  • There is some overlinking of words.
  • "In 1988, Imelda and Ferdinand Marcos, together with Adnan Khashoggi," What was their relation?
  • " fortune came from Yamashita's Gold." Briefly explain what this is.
  • "Monet’s “L’Église et La Seine à Vétheuil” (1881), Alfred Sisley’s “Langland Bay” (1887), and Albert Marquet’s “Le Cyprès de Djenan Sidi Said” (1946)." These names should be written in italics.
  • "Imelda is a fashion and pop culture icon" Where?
  • "known as the "Steel Butterfly." Why?
  • The intro seems a bit short for a article this size, it should summarise the entire article.
  • That's all for now, you there, Imeldific? FunkMonk (talk) 17:29, 20 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
Fixes look nice, though shouldn't "She has a collection of over a thousand pairs of shoes" be in past tense? FunkMonk (talk) 22:42, 25 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
It's a technicality but okay. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Imeldific (talkcontribs) 01:04, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply
Well, she doesn't own them anymore it seems, anyhow, all looks good to me now, so will pass. FunkMonk (talk) 01:13, 26 March 2016 (UTC)Reply