Talk:Ike for President (advertisement)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 19:02, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

I'll be reviewing this! Of course, while QPQ isn't required, if you fancy returning the favor, I have a list of GANs for the taking here. I also plan on adding more politics and history nominations within the next week, if you would prefer to wait for something more in your topic area. In any case, I'm excited to see this nominated, as my grandmother (who was in high school when it aired) cites this advertisement as one of her first television memories.

Thanks for taking the review. I'll definitely review your politics/history article as soon as I get chance. And it is really interesting to know your grandmother's experience. When I was doing my research for "Daisy", someone (on-Wiki) told me that he saw the ad as a young boy, and had "sleepless nights" after it! I don't assume anyone watching "Daisy" today will be scared. Same with "Ike for President"; it was a masterpiece for 1950s, but merely a cartoon today! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 22:33, 3 March 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Link Republican and Democrat in lede
• Missing end comma after "dressed as a drum major"
• Link Jingle

Background

• Dwight D. Eisenhower was the commander of the Allied Expeditionary Force in Europe. It feels obvious, but should specify "during World War II"
• "rejected all requests" → "denied all requests"
• "and to him as the Chief of Staff"
• After "referring to his nickname", I don't believe you need a colon or quotes around "Ike", just a comma
• "After winning the Republican New Hampshire and Minnesota presidential primaries" → "After winning the Republican presidential primaries in New Hampshire and Minnesota"
• Link primary election
  • @GhostRiver: Done all! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 05:17, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

Creation

• Either "1952 presidential election" should be linked in the sentence with the Wood quote, or that sentence should specify Eisenhower's presidential campaign rather than just "the" campaign
• "$19,500,000" → "$19.5 million" and "$58,500,000" → "$58.5 million" per MOS:LARGENUM
• "The Eisenhower campaign spent mostly on their advertising campaign named "Eisenhower Answers America"" → "Most of the advertising expenditure from the Eisenhower campaign was devoted to a television advertisement campaign titled "Eisenhower Answers America"." (checked against source and a little clearer)
• Also, to be pedantic, I'd expand the page range in the attached reference to 265 from 266, as I had to go back to page 265 to check my revision against the source
• Missing closing comma after "a campaign aide of Eisenhower"
• "and told him that"

Synopsis

• "while music plays" → "as music plays"
• "as the drum major" → "as a drum major"
• Should either have the direct quote from Christiansen or say "which author Paul Christiansen says is a reference to the Democratic Party mascot"
• "and the rising sun. The sun turns into an Ike campaign button." → "and the rising sun, which turns into an Ike campaign button."

Analysis

• Link Jingle
• "to win name recognition and communicate" → "to win name recognition, communicate"
• Negro should be capitalized, with "Negro spiritual" linked to Spirituals

Aftermath, impact, and legacy

• "against the divorced Stevenson"
• Link both Ivory (soap) and Palmolive (brand)
• "95%" → "95 percent" per MOS:PERCENT and internal consistency
• "most of the people viewing" → "most viewers"
• "already committed to voting for Stevenson"
• "at-least" → "at least"
• "was won" → "were won"

References & works cited

• One verifiability note mentioned above, otherwise good

General comments

• All images are in the public domain
• For the captions on Cochran and Stevenson, I'd use those to reiterate why they are relevant (e.g. "Jacqueline Cochran, pictured here in 1943, coordinated the advertisement with the Walt Disney Company")
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Earwig score shows no obvious copyvio concerns

Putting on hold now! Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 17:28, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: Thanks a lot for your review. I think I addressed all the comments. These were my edits. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 17:58, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

All of my concerns have been addressed, happy to pass! — GhostRiver 18:57, 5 March 2022 (UTC)

Great! Thanks a lot! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 19:00, 5 March 2022 (UTC)