Talk:I Lost a Friend/GA2

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 11:39, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I believe I owe you one after you co-nominated "Lift Yourself", so I will give back by reviewing this! --K. Peake 11:39, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Add mention of Finneas writing and producing the song as the second sentence since the lead is quite short currently; it should be written out in the body anyway because otherwise the credits in the infobox are WP:OR and a personnel section is not needed for one performer
• Target single to Single (music); this will be the third sentence
• "Described as an electropop ballad," → "An electropop ballad," with the target
• "childhood friend, and regretting and wondering" → "childhood friend and regretting doing so, as well as wondering" since this is more accurate
• "A music video for the track was" → "An accompanying music video was" with the wikilink
• The body does not call the field "overgrown" or anything familiar
• Swap live performance and remix order
• "A remix by" → "A remix of the song by"

Background and development

• Target WBUR to WBUR-FM
• "Finneas explains the song" → "Finneas explained the song"
• "He says" → "He said,"
• "He continues to say it's about" → "He continued by saying the song is about"
• "he had reunited with again." → "with whom he had reunited again."
• "going to hear it," → "going to hear the song"
• "to get his opinion on the song." → "to get his opinion."
• "The songs cover art" → "The song's cover art"
• Writing in 2018 sentence should come directly after the above instead
• Digital download and streaming part should come before the second single status
• Target single to Single (music)
• "on Finneas' debut extended play (EP), → "from Finneas' debut EP"
• Remove wikilink on Blood Harmony and add the release year of the album in brackets
• Move the remix mention to music video and promotion after the live performances in a new para

 Not done

• "the song during the afternoon in" → "the song during an afternoon when in"
• Add a sentence saying the writing and production credits

Composition and lyrics

• "described the genre of the track as an" → "described "I Lost a Friend" as an"
• Target ballad to Sentimental ballad
• "features minimalist of instrumentation of" → "features minimalist instrumentation that consists of"
• Remove wikilinks on piano and drums
• "an aggressive beat and" → "an aggressive beat, and"
• "later explained in an interview with Pitchfork saying:" → "later explained the production in an interview with Pitchfork, saying:"
• "a "talk-through," and wanted to" → "a "talk-through", which meant he tried to"
• "He showcases this in the pre-chorus." → "Finneas showcases the process in the pre-chorus:" with the wikilink per MOS:LINK2SECT
• [11] should solely be at the end of the para
• "discusses the pre-chorus" → "discussed the pre-chorus"
• "and people to stay" → "and others to stay"
• "fights," He further says," → "fights", and also said,"

Critical reception

• "met with mainly positive reviews." → "met with mainly positive reviews from music critics" with the target
• "on your tracks."" → "on your tracks"."
• Will Richards' review belongs after Brittany Spanos' because the former is the most critical review here so should come after the others that are clearly more positive
• "Writing for NME, Will Richards" → "For NME, Will Richards"
• "less positive with the song," → "less positive towards the song,"
• "distorted bass", comparing it to Billie Eilish's" → "distorted bass," comparing "I Lost a Friend" to Billie Eilish's debut studio album" with the wikilink
• Add release year of the album in brackets
• Move the remix praise to the remix's new para in the succeeding section to this one
• "was also praised by critics." → "was praised by critics."
• "and that it shifts" → "and stated that the remix shifts"
• "noted the original featured a" → "noted that while the original features a"

Music video and promotion

• Mention in the opening sentence that it was released to Finneas' YouTube channel
• "the sunset lowers and the darkness" → "the sunset lowers and darkness"
• "As he continues to" → "While Finneas continues to"
• "met with positive reviews" → "met with positive reviews from critics."
• "its one take", and that "images" → "its one take", noting the choreography for "images"
• "Finneas toured throughout" → "He toured across"
• "he performed from the EP during the tour." → "Finneas performed from the EP on the tour."
• "In October of the same year," → "That same month,"
• "performed on a keyboard," → "performed while sat at a keyboard,"
• "covered in blue and neon lights showcasing" → "being covered in blue as neon lights showcased" with the target
• "in hushed vocals.[20] He briefly wanders off the stage before" → "in hushed vocals, and briefly wandered off the stage during the performance before"

References

• Copyvio score looks too high at 43.5%; fix the WBUR ref
• Make sure all of these are archived by using the tool
• Target WBUR to WBUR-FM on ref 1
• Target Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on ref 2

 Not done

• WP:OVERLINK of Billboard on ref 7
• Middle name should be in firstname parameter for ref 10

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all the issues are fixed, was nice to do a review for you once again! --K. Peake 15:21, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

Kyle Peake, thank you so much for the review! It's always a pleasure working with you! I have addressed all of your concerns. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 18:44, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss Thank you, but the not done template should only be marked on things that are really not done; though why are you against moving the remix info? --K. Peake 21:24, 16 November 2020 (UTC)

I feel it would be better in the background. The Ultimate Boss (talk) 01:58, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

The Ultimate Boss ✓ Pass now, good job on solving the issues but I still did some brief copyediting! --K. Peake 09:03, 18 November 2020 (UTC)