Talk:I Hate Boys/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Trnhgduoc2222 in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: IndianBio (talk · contribs) 05:53, 26 April 2013 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for reviewing! Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 09:09, 26 April 2013 (UTC)Reply

Starting review. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 01:13, 2 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

External links check, some of them are redirects, can you fix them possibly? —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 03:40, 8 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

  Done Here: [1]Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 06:00, 8 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
Lead
  • who also handled the production of the song. It is a pop song--> REpetition of song, try "who also handled the production of the track. "I Hate Boys" is a pop song"
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  • but it contains hate-driven song about ridiculing men.--> Doesn't make sense, what were you trying to say here?
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  • It was serviced to Australian radio on June 28, 2010 --> add a comma after 2010
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  • The song received mixed to favorable reviews from music critics; some critics --> The song received mixed to favorable response from music critics; some reviewers
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  • the gang chants --> needs an expansion or wikilink
Background
  • Initially "I Hate Boys" was supposed to be produced by Le Tigre.[1] Le Tigre’s Johanna Fateman wrote about working with Aguilera on the Le Tigre website --> Initially "I Hate Boys" was supposed to be produced by American electroclash band, Le Tigre.[1] Group member Johanna Fateman wrote about working with Aguilera on their official website
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  • There's nothing about the inspiration of the track?
    • Nope, I can't find the suitable resources.
Composition
  • It contains a --> "I hate boys" contains a
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  • gang chant --> Explain or expand
  • Lyrically, it comes off like --> This seems like your opinion, and needs an author to balance it out, like "ACcording to Idolator's XXXX, lyrically "I Hate Boys"... " You have done it in the later prose, but it is mainly needed here
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  • I Kissed A Girl --> I Kissed a Girl
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Reception
  • 'I Hate Boys' is a Christina track we totally back - and, --> Use en-dash here
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  • Again, I hate it when the critical response section becomes a QUOTEFARM. Please rephrase at least 50% of these quotes in your own prose.
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Other

On hold for changes. Short and concise article. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 06:41, 8 May 2013 (UTC)Reply

I made the WP:ACCESS changes for you and it seems the Gaon company stopped publishing the sales of the songs, except for the current version. Passed it nevertheless. —Indian:BIO · [ ChitChat ] 02:40, 12 May 2013 (UTC)Reply
OMG, Thanks a lot! Trnhgduoc2222 (talk) 06:37, 13 May 2013 (UTC)Reply