Talk:Hypertension/GA3

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 14:07, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

• "Normal blood pressure within the range of 100-140mmHg systolic (top reading) and 60-90mmHg diastolic (bottom reading)." ---> "Normal blood pressure is within the range of 100-140mmHg systolic (top reading) and 60-90mmHg diastolic (bottom reading)."
• "blood pressure that are greater" - Either "blood pressure that is greater" or "blood pressures that are greater"
• "severely elevated blood presure." - Typo
• "and characterised by headaches and" - Is this the British spelling for "characterized" (I am not real familiar with British English spelling)? Because if it isn't, this is also a typo
• "Pre-eclampsia can occasionally progress to a life-threatening condition called eclampsia, which is a hypertensive emergency and has several serious complications including vision loss, cerebral edema, seizures or convulsions, renal failure, pulmonary edema, and disseminated intravascular coagulation[11][13]" - There is no period at the end of that sentence.
• "Failure to thrive, seizures, irritability, lack of energy, and difficulty breathing[14] can be associated with hypertension in neonates and young infants. In older infants and children, hypertension can cause headache, unexplained irritability, fatigue, failure to thrive, blurred vision, nosebleeds, and facial paralysis," - Similarly, why is there a comma at the end of this sentence and not a period?
• "although the mechanisms linking these exposures to adult hypertension remain obscure." - [Citation needed]
• "may also contribute to increased peripheral resistance and vascular damage in hypertension." - [Citation needed]
• "Typical tests are listed in the table." - [Citation needed]
• "eGFR can also provides a baseline measurement of kidney function that can be used to monitor for side effects of certain antihypertensive drugs on kidney function. Additionally, testing of urine samples for protein is used as a secondary indicator of kidney disease. Glucose testing is done to determine if diabetes mellitus is present. Electrocardiogram (EKG/ECG) testing is done to check for evidence that the heart is under strain from high blood pressure. It may also show whether there is thickening of the heart muscle (left ventricular hypertrophy) or whether the heart has experienced a prior minor disturbance such as a silent heart attack. A chest X-ray may be performed to look for signs of heart enlargement or damage to heart tissue." - [Citation needed]
• "and it also generally encourages the consumption of nuts, whole grains, fish, poultry, fruits and vegetables while lowering the consumption of red meats, sweets, and sugar. It is also "rich in potassium, magnesium, and calcium, as well as protein"." - [Citation needed]
• "treatment is inititated the" - typo
• "to treament but should" - typo
• "If a fourth agent is needed then additional diuretics of spironolactone or a higher-dose of a thiazide-like diuretics. " ---> "If a fourth agent is needed, an additional diuretics of spironolactone or a higher-dose of a thiazide-like diuretics is used."
• "In the year 2000 it is estimated that nearly one billion people" - Reword to "In the year 2000, it was estimated that nearly one billion people" or "As of 2000, nearly one billion people"; you may also use something similar.
• "In 1995 it is estimated that 43 million people in the United States" - See previous comment
• "More recently angiotensin receptor blockers and renin inhibitors have also been introduced as antihypertensive agents." - [Citation needed]
• "Nonetheless, the achievement of blood pressure goals is possible, and most importantly, lowering blood pressure significantly reduces the risk of death due to heart disease and stroke, the development of other debilitating conditions, and the cost associated with advanced medical care.,[104][105]" - That is strange, now there is a period and a comma at the end of that sentence
• Why is the url exposing on reference #74?

Thank you for your careful reading of this article, much appreciated. I have made all the changes you suggest and addressed each comment by revision. Adh (talk) 20:55, 2 March 2012 (UTC)

1.  Done"Normal blood pressure within the range of 100-140mmHg systolic (top reading) and 60-90mmHg diastolic (bottom reading)." ---> "Normal blood pressure is within the range of 100-140mmHg systolic (top reading) and 60-90mmHg diastolic (bottom reading)."
2.  Done"blood pressure that are greater" - Either "blood pressure that is greater" or "blood pressures that are greater"
3.  Done"severely elevated blood presure." - Typo
4.  Done"and characterised by headaches and" - Is this the British spelling for "characterized" (I am not real familiar with British English spelling)? Because if it isn't, this is also a typo - characterised is acceptable British English spelling but I have changed it to be consistent with other parts of the article.
5.  Done"Pre-eclampsia can occasionally progress to a life-threatening condition called eclampsia, which is a hypertensive emergency and has several serious complications including vision loss, cerebral edema, seizures or convulsions, renal failure, pulmonary edema, and disseminated intravascular coagulation[11][13]" - There is no period at the end of that sentence.
6.  Done"Failure to thrive, seizures, irritability, lack of energy, and difficulty breathing[14] can be associated with hypertension in neonates and young infants. In older infants and children, hypertension can cause headache, unexplained irritability, fatigue, failure to thrive, blurred vision, nosebleeds, and facial paralysis," - Similarly, why is there a comma at the end of this sentence and not a period?
7.  Done"although the mechanisms linking these exposures to adult hypertension remain obscure." - [Citation needed]
8.  Done"may also contribute to increased peripheral resistance and vascular damage in hypertension." - [Citation needed]
9.  Done"Typical tests are listed in the table." - [Citation needed] - I have deleted this sentence and the relevant citations are in the table legend
10.  Done"eGFR can also provides a baseline measurement of kidney function that can be used to monitor for side effects of certain antihypertensive drugs on kidney function. Additionally, testing of urine samples for protein is used as a secondary indicator of kidney disease. Glucose testing is done to determine if diabetes mellitus is present. Electrocardiogram (EKG/ECG) testing is done to check for evidence that the heart is under strain from high blood pressure. It may also show whether there is thickening of the heart muscle (left ventricular hypertrophy) or whether the heart has experienced a prior minor disturbance such as a silent heart attack. A chest X-ray may be performed to look for signs of heart enlargement or damage to heart tissue." - [Citation needed]
11.  Done"and it also generally encourages the consumption of nuts, whole grains, fish, poultry, fruits and vegetables while lowering the consumption of red meats, sweets, and sugar. It is also "rich in potassium, magnesium, and calcium, as well as protein"." - [Citation needed] - I have re-worded this and added appropriate citation
12.  Done"treatment is inititated the" - typo
13.  Done"to treament but should" - typo
14.  Done"If a fourth agent is needed then additional diuretics of spironolactone or a higher-dose of a thiazide-like diuretics. " ---> "If a fourth agent is needed, an additional diuretics of spironolactone or a higher-dose of a thiazide-like diuretics is used." - I have re-written this and added appropriate citation
15.  Done"In the year 2000 it is estimated that nearly one billion people" - Reword to "In the year 2000, it was estimated that nearly one billion people" or "As of 2000, nearly one billion people"; you may also use something similar.
16.  Done"In 1995 it is estimated that 43 million people in the United States" - See previous comment
17.  Done"More recently angiotensin receptor blockers and renin inhibitors have also been introduced as antihypertensive agents." - [Citation needed]
18.  Done"Nonetheless, the achievement of blood pressure goals is possible, and most importantly, lowering blood pressure significantly reduces the risk of death due to heart disease and stroke, the development of other debilitating conditions, and the cost associated with advanced medical care.,[104][105]" - That is strange, now there is a period and a comma at the end of that sentence
19.  Done Why is the url exposing on reference #74? - correct citation added

Oh, sorry I forgot about this article. Because you have fixed/addressed my issues, I am going to pass this article.--12george1 (talk) 02:19, 10 March 2012 (UTC)