Talk:Hurricane Norbert (1984)
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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 14:00, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
Seeing as we're both in the WikiCup, I figured I'd do you the favor of reviewing your article.
- Right off the bat, I was wondering whether you could think of a more interesting opening sentence? Also, did it strike Baja California as in the province, or the peninsula? If the latter, it should be linked as such. If the former, then link that and avoid linking twice in the lede
- Reworded, it struck the state, BTW. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Something is wrong now. You have the 2nd sentence starting in lower-case. It's a better opener, for sure. However, you link to Baja California and later Baja California Norte, both of which go to the same place. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:36, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- Reworded, it struck the state, BTW. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Where did it form? That'd be good to indicate in the lede.
- Like most EPAC storms, far from land. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Inserted "somewhat". YE Pacific Hurricane
- The track map indicates it was fairly close to some land. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:36, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- Like most EPAC storms, far from land. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- You failed to mention its final turn to the northwest in the lede
- "resulted in many people being homeless" - try rewording. It's a bit awkward
- I don't think you need to link rain :P
- I don't see why not? YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- YE, "rain" is such a common term. I doubt anybody except a stuffed animal, maybe, would need to know what "rain" is. :P HurricaneFan25 23:30, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- I don't see why not? YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- "weak deep-layer winds" - what is that?
- Wikilinked. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- You didn't... --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:36, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- I changed it because I did not find a good link for it. Instead, I made the wording less technical. YE Pacific Hurricane 03:55, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- You still don't explain what "weak deep-layer steering currents" is though. It's just there with no context. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:52, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- Finally found an ok wikilink. YE 14:06, 14 October 2011 (UTC)
- You still don't explain what "weak deep-layer steering currents" is though. It's just there with no context. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:52, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- I changed it because I did not find a good link for it. Instead, I made the wording less technical. YE Pacific Hurricane 03:55, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- You didn't... --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:36, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- Wikilinked. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- "accelerated early on September 16, and two hours later Norbert became a hurricane" - two hours from when? From "early on September 16"? That's like saying Earth is near the sun
- "On September 17, Norbert turned from the west to the north" - the track shows it moving eastward before going north. Later in the sentence it says "Norbert began to turn back to the east", which doesn't seem right at all.
- "Norbert was upgraded into a major hurricane" - I don't think "into" is the right preposition
- "Repeated penetrations were made into the eyewall, and mapped the storm's three-dimensional (3-D) wind field" - the penetrations mapped? That seems a bit odd of a word choice
- You don't say when it was that Norbert dissipated. The infobox says Sept. 27th
- Added. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- You now link tropical cyclone at the end of the MH. That seems like a bad time to link it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 03:36, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
- Added. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- "Described as "big and ugly" by meteorologists, planes near the area were advised to use caution while navigating in the area." - the planes were described as big and ugly? :P Avoid "the area" twice
- "Ignacio India, the Mazatlan government radio station marine operator wrote "warned shipping to exercise extreme caution [from Jalisco to Baja California Sur]"." - I'm not sure who said what, but the quote is a little awkward as written. This could be a time when passive voice would be better off using (and avoiding trying to use that person's name)
That's pretty much it. Have you tried finding any more info related to Norbert's remnants in AZ? I'll put it on hold for a period of seven days, blah blah blah. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:00, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Found nothing for CA and AZ, other than rain. Ill check the NWS Las Vegas to see if they have anything. YE Pacific Hurricane 14:35, 11 October 2011 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. YE Pacific Hurricane
- Have you asked David Roth about making a rainfall map for the storm? --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 14:52, 13 October 2011 (UTC)
Merge?
editI redid the storm subsection with all relevant information I could find, and it fits easily within that section. Thus, I don't think we really need this article. Thoughts Hurricanehink, Yellow Evan, Cyclonebiskit? TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk · contributions) 01:34, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- Hold on, some new information was added here from a place I no longer have access to. YE Pacific Hurricane 02:06, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
- There's a couple AP and UPI news articles that I still need to get to the bottom off and access via LexisNexis to maybe fledge it out a little more, but I've added some relevant information from the sources of the season section that does cover more content that's currently in the season section. YE Pacific Hurricane 04:47, 10 January 2022 (UTC)
Neutral. Seeing as the season article is only ~28 kb worth of readable text, Norbert is only ~5 kb (excluding lead), and Odile is only ~4 kb (again excluding lead), I think Norbert should only be merged if Odile is. Norbert and Odile together currently make up 3.8 kb worth of readable prose in the main article (or 14% of the season article). If both articles were merged in full without any rewriting, the ~9 kb of readable prose would be 27% of the season article's total readable prose. Not too unreasonable. I'd like to see what the sections would look like if all of the content from both articles were integrated (so making sure that no information in either article was missing from the section). I wouldn't mind seeing three paragraphs for both storms. Given that the season article is already up for GA nom, I believe now would be a good time to merge both. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 04:08, 18 January 2022 (UTC)