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LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:54, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

This article is extremely well-written. However, I found a handful of minor issues. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:54, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • The system progressed west Change "west" to "westward".
  • Persistent wind shear stifled development of the storm, though following repeated bursts of deep convection it intensified into a minimal hurricane on September 3 shortly before striking Belize. Add two commas, one after "deep convection" and another after "September 3".
  • Once onshore, the hurricane rapidly degraded and its surface low dissipated over Guatemala on September 4. Add a comma after "rapidly degraded".
  • Link Caribbean.
  • For the storm's maximum sustained winds, it should be specified in the article that these are maximum 1-minute sustained winds.
Meteorological history
  • On August 23, 2020, the National Hurricane Center (NHC) identified a westward moving tropical wave over West Africa. Change "westward moving" to "westward-moving". It should be a hyphenated word.
  • Convection increased by August 27 as the wave traversed the central Atlantic, Add a comma after "August 27".
  • Upon entering the Caribbean Sea on August 30, the system started to organize with evidence of a broad surface low apparent on satellite-derived observations. Add a comma after "organize".
  • Convection gradually increased as the system continued west across the Caribbean and appeared well-organized on satellite imagery. Add a comma after "increased".
  • Scatterometer data and ship observations revealed tropical storm-force winds south of Haiti and southeast of Jamaica early on September 1 and post-storm analysis indicated the system developed into Tropical Storm Nana at 06:00 UTC. Add a comma after "September 1".
  • It was not warned on as a tropical storm until 17:00 UTC when aircraft reconnaissance confirmed a well-defined low with winds of 70 mph (110 km/h) aloft with estimated surface winds of 50 mph (85 km/h). Add a comma after "17:00 UTC".
  • Persistent moderate wind shear and intrusions of dry air inhibited significant development of the system as it passed 155 mi (250 km) south of the Cayman Islands. Add a comma after "system".
  • Early on September 2, a burst of deep convection (with cloud tops as cold as −112 °F (−80 °C) developed over the storm's center and microwave satellite imagery revealed the formation of an eye-like feature. Add a comma after "the storm's center".
  • Another convective burst early on September 3 led to the storm intensifying to a hurricane by 03:00 UTC. "hurricane" should be changed to "Category 1 hurricane", for the readers who aren't familiar with the NHC's SSWWS scale. Also, link "Category 1 hurricane" to Saffir–Simpson scale#Category 1.
  • Link "Mexico/Guatemala border" to Guatemala–Mexico border.
  • and accordingly, the NHC did not expect Nana to redevelop. Did the NHC later revise this assessment before Nana redeveloped into Julio? (I wasn't tracking the storm, so I'm unaware of the specifics as of this writing.) If they later expected development, then that should be mentioned. Otherwise, no action is needed here.
    • They didn't expect the system to develop until it basically happened. No high-risk outlooks were issued ahead of genesis. From Julio's TCR (p. 3): "Although some of the NHC forecasts for Atlantic basin Hurricane Nana did show a remnant low pressure area in the eastern Pacific basin, none of those forecasts called for the system to redevelop into a tropical cyclone over the eastern Pacific." ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:46, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Julio ultimately dissipated early on September 7 to the southwest of Socorro Island. Add a comma after "September 7".
Preparations and impact
  • Link Honduras.
  • In St. Lucia, increased turbidity and clogging due to heavy rain forced the temporary closure of the Theobalds Treatment Plant which cut the water supply to residents in northern parts of the country. Add a comma after "Theobalds Treatment Plant".
  • Hurricane Nana made landfall in a sparsely populated area of Belize. Change "sparsely populated" to "sparsely-populated". This should be a hyphenated word.
  • Rainfall associated with its passage was heaviest to the south of the hurricane's center due to its lopsided structure. Add a comma after "the hurricane's center".
  • and the National Meteorological Service of Belize reported no damage from it. "no damage from it" is kind of vague. I would specify that this is referring to storm surge damage.
  • Large swells did cause minor to piers in Placencia. Looks like a mistake here. Change "minor" to "minor damage".
  • Link "Hopkins" to Hopkins, Belize, "Independence" to Independence, Belize, and link Sittee River.
  • Residences across Dangriga, Hopkins, Placencia lost power. Link Dangriga. Also add "and" after "Hopkins,".
  • Link "Cabañas" to Cabañas, La Paz, and "Santa Ana" to Santa Ana, Francisco Morazán.
  • Link "flash floods" to flash flood.
  • In Jamaica, Nana's rainfall caused some flooding in parts of the Southern part of the country. "Southern" should be lowercase, unless it is referring to a name.
  • Authorities emphasized that the region was vulnerable floods due to soil saturation from the annual rainy season and the prolific rains from tropical storms Amanda and Cristobal in May and June earlier that year. There are a couple of errors here. Change "vulnerable floods" to "vulnerable to floods", and add a comma after "floods".
  • A bridge collapsed in the Alta Verapaz Department, affecting 500 people. How did the bridge collapse affect them?
  • Throughout the nation, a total of 18,865 people were directly affected though overall damage was not major. Add a comma after "directly affected".
  • Did Julio have any notable impacts in Mexico? If so, it should be added to this section, since any impacts Julio had would basically be a continuation of Nana's impacts in the area.
Sources
  • No issues here. However, I would add translated titles to the foreign language sources, if you plan on taking this article to FAC.

@Cyclonebiskit: These are all of the issues that I found. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:54, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

  • @LightandDark2000: I've addressed and/or replied to all of the concerns brought above, thank you for the review! I disagree with the suggestion to add most of the commas as they're unnecessary and interrupt the sentence structure or provide no benefit to the reader. ~ Cyclonebiskit (chat) 20:46, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply

Final edit

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    I am going to ✓ Pass this article. Congratulations! LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 21:52, 26 October 2021 (UTC)Reply
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