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LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:55, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply


This article is very-well written. I found a handful of issues (mostly minor ones), but other than that, the article is a solid candidate for a GAN. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:55, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

Lead
  • that situated over the northern Atlantic. Change "that situated" to "that was situated". Silly typo here.
  • The low quickly acquired subtropical characteristics. Link "subtropical" to subtropical storm.
  • just off the Portuguese coast later. Change "later" to "later that day".
  • City, municipal, and the national government provided funds to repair damage to buildings as well as the forests and launch cleanup efforts. Add a comma after "forests" and change "launch" to "and also to launch". Also add "local" before "forests".
  • For the maximum sustained winds, you need to add a note specifying that these are 1-minute sustained winds, similar to the note on Hurricane Olivia (2018)'s article. Also, you need to add the corresponding "Notes" section to the article.
Meteorological history
  • the system separated from the front and its banding features became better established, Add a comma after "the front".
  • Moderate vertical wind shear and dry air hindered the development of thunderstorm activity or convection outside the southeastern portion of the system as it tracked generally southwest. Add a comma after "system". Also change "southwest" to "southwestward".
  • Leslie weakened into a subtropical depression around 00:00 UTC on 25 September due to the continuing wind shear and dry air. Add a comma after "25 September".
  • Leslie became an extratropical cyclone around 12:00 UTC after its circulation expanded along a baroclinic zone. Add a comma after "12:00 UTC".
  • as it tracked south of west. This phrase here is awkward. Change "south of west" to "souhwestward". This wording is clearer and more concise.
  • As a result, Leslie became a tropical storm by 18:00 UTC on 29 September while it was located approximately 1,850 km (1,150 mi) west-southwest of Flores Island in the Azores. Add a comma after "29 September".
  • Banding features began to increase on October 1 as the wind shear subsided. Add a comma after "October 1".
  • Leslie continued a west-southwestward to southwestward motion over the next day or so while located in weak steering currents and positioned between high-pressure systems that were located to the west and northeast. Add a comma after "next day or so".
  • an eye at its low-levels. "Low-levels" does not need to be hyphenated here, since it isn't a complex word here.
  • and the storm only possessed small bands of convection. Minor grammatical issue here. Change "only possessed" to "possessed only". A lot of people make this kind of mistake (I still do from time to time).
  • Leslie turned towards the east from late 5 October to 6 October under the influence of mid-latitude westerly flow. Add a comma after "6 October".
  • Leslie bottomed out as a 85 km/h (50 mph) tropical storm at 00:00 UTC as it passed over an area of cool sea surface temperatures. Add a comma after "00:00 UTC".
  • Leslie began to restrengthen later on 8 October as an inner core began to develop and convection became more intense. Add a comma after "8 October".
  • Around that time, the storm's strongest convection was concentrated towards the north and an irregular eye had emerged on satellite imagery. Add a comma after "the north".
  • The cyclone began to proceed east-northeastward early on 11 October as strengthening continued. Add a comma after "11 October".
  • Leslie began to slowly weaken once more later that day as sea surface temperatures decreased to 23–24 °C (73–75 °F) and wind shear increased. Add a comma after "later that day".
  • Shortly after, Leslie began to transition to an extratropical cyclone as colder air entered from the south and west and the system's mid-level eye decayed. Change "transition to" to "transition into". Also, add a comma after "extratropical cyclone".
  • The NHC issued its final advisory on Leslie around 21:00 UTC on 13 October after the storm became fully extratropical. Add a comma after "13 October".
  • was assisted by Leslie. How so? I'm not sure if most ordinary readers will understand this phrase.
Never mind. I see the explanation immediately afterward. LOL. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:55, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
Preparations
  • A tropical storm watch was issued for Madeira on 11 October at 21:00 UTC. Add a comma after "11 October".
  • Multiple flights were canceled on 12 October and all flights were canceled on 13 October. Add a comma after "12 October".
  • A 1990s themed party. "1990s-themed" should be hyphenated.
  • were closed on 13 October as Leslie approached Portugal. Add a comma after "13 October".
  • In Seville, parks were closed on October 13 as a precaution due to Leslie's approach. Add a comma after "precaution".
  • were all placed on orange alert due to the expectation of strong winds and flooding rainfall from the approaching Leslie. Change "placed on" to "placed under an". Also add a comma after "orange alert".
Impacts
  • Nearly 500 employees fixed 150 antennas which re-established transmission services. Add a comma after "150 antennas".
  • Done. 19:55, 21 June 2021 (UTC)
  • Link Figueira da Foz at its first mention. You can remove the second link from later one.
  • cutting production of the resin Either specify which type of resin is being mentioned here, or modify "the resin" to just "resin". And also link to "resin".
  • The core trees of the forest, which had survived two wildfires and a major storm, was largely destroyed. I would mention the years when those natural disasters had struck (they are mentioned in the cited article).
  • six changing rooms experienced both internal and roof damage and a dishwashing station was destroyed. Add a comma after "roof damage".
  • Eight schools were closed in the municipality due a lack of water and power. Another typo here. Change "due a" to "due to a". Also add a comma after "municipality".
  • The power company EDP declared a state of emergency in Coimbra as a result of damage to electrical infrastructure. Add a comma after "Coimbra".
  • Link Mealhada at the first mention. You can unlink it from later in the section.
  • The roof of Maritime Police facility was lifted away and multiple walls destroyed. Change "and multiple walls destroyed" to "and the facility had multiple walls destroyed". Also add a comma after "lifted away".
  • A gas leak occurred at a restaurant. Change "occurred" to "also occurred". This makes the paragraph flow more smoothly.
  • Shipyards and a pavilion were damaged in Mealhada municipality and a cafeteria sustained damage in Alameda municipality. Add a comma after "Mealhada municipality".
  • Madeiria archipelago. Uh...Did you mean "Madeira archipelago"?
  • Over 200 mm (7.9 in) of rain fell in Montseny and 209.3 mm (8.24 in) in Viladrau. Add "of rain" after "(8.24 in)", and also add a comma after "Montseny".
  • The Albujón highway was closed in Cartagena due to the storm. Add a comma after "Cartagena".
  • 7.6 m (25 ft) high surf. This needs to be hyphenated. So, it should be "7.6 m (25 ft)-high surf".
  • Several roads in Carcassonne were either blocked by felled trees and cars swept away by floodwaters or destroyed. This phrase doesn't really makes sense and needs to be rewritten. Maybe "Several roads in Carcassonne were blocked by felled trees, and cars were swept away or destroyed by floodwaters".
  • Change "flashflooding" to "flash flooding", and link to flash flood.
Aftermath
  • in areas heavily affected by wildfires and Leslie,. "Heavily-affected" should be hyphenated.
  • was closed from 30 May–7 June, 2019, Remove the comma from after "7 June". There are no commas within the dates for the DMY formatting.
  • Fisheries near Figueira da Foz operated at below normal capacity through 2020 due to a reduction in Sardine supply that occurred after Leslie moved through the area. Add a comma after "2020".
  • on 27 November, 2018, Same issue as another one noted earlier. Remove the comma after "17 November".
  • Change "authorizing" to "authorising". The article uses British English, so this should be consistent throughout the article.
  • Despite repairs having taken place to the sports center,. Change "to" to "at".
  • after Leslie and a fire in 2017 destroyed most of it. Add "had" after "destroyed".
Source review
  • FN 53 - This citation should be marked as "dead" in the "url-status" parameter. The archived link works, though.
  • FN 55 - The archived link works, but you might want to mark this citation as one that requires a subscription.
  • FN 120 - The reference title contains a typo. "He" should be "The".

These are all of the issues that I have found. The article also seems to be close to A-Class status, so after it gets promoted to GA, it shouldn't take much work to get it to A-Class and then FA status. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 17:55, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  
    I am going to ✓ Pass this article. Great job! Congratulations on getting this monster of an article to GA. LightandDark2000 🌀 (talk) 21:13, 21 June 2021 (UTC)Reply
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