Talk:Hurricane Gladys (1975)

Latest comment: 9 years ago by 12george1 in topic GA Review

Todo edit

It has some good content, but there are numerous spelling and grammar errors, and the writing just plain doesn't make sense in places. A full copyedit is needed for B. Juliancolton Tropical Cyclone 13:19, 23 May 2008 (UTC)Reply

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 01:55, 3 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

  • Mention SSHS in the lead when you say C1
  • You mention low wind shear and warm waters in the lede that allowed for strengthening, but that's not in the MH. Why not?
  • "It became one of the few hurricane to be seen on radar over 150 mi (240 km) from the continental United States." - clarify at the time, since radar might have changed since then
  • "Thereafter, the storm weakened slightly, and was downgraded into a Category 3 hurricane." - when?
  • The lede says Gladys merged with a large ET, but the MH doesn't mention the size. How come?
  • "for the now defunct" - add dash between now and defunct
  • "Although initially expected to not threaten land,[6] when Gladys neared the East Coast of the United States, meteorologists at the NHC forecast the storm to make landfall within three days;[7] a hurricane watch was issued for North Carolina's Outer Banks,[8] extending from Cape Lookout to Kitty Hawk." - this could be split into two sentences. The first one should be reorganized, as the structure isn't the most concise.
  • Anything else about the waves? IMO, the bit about the waves in NC should be moved to the preps paragraph, where you already mention the fishermen defying warnings.
  • Unfortunately, there wasn't anything more. But I did fix the second part, I think-12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)Reply
  • "Despite warnings to fishermen, 40 of them went to Cape Point near Cape Hatteras due to the "increased feeding activities" of fish during rough seas." - I'd change "them" to fishermen", and just start off with "Despite warnings,"
  • [1] - there isn't much here, but there is a bit more Canada impact
Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:28, 3 June 2014 (UTC)Reply

All in all, it's pretty good. This shouldn't take too long to do. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:55, 3 June 2014 (UTC)Reply