Talk:Hurricane Danielle (1998)/GA2
Latest comment: 11 years ago by TropicalAnalystwx13 in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: TheAustinMan (talk · contribs) 01:30, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
Hello, TropicalAnalystwx13, I will be reviewing Hurricane Danielle (1998). TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 01:30, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
Lead edit
- "Tracking generally west-northwestward, the disturbance was disorganized initially..." I think you should flip 'initially' and 'disorganized' around to keep the flow of the clause.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- You could link wind shear.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...low-grade Category 1 hurricane..." I wouldn't define the intensity of a hurricane within its respective classification as grades. I would consider using 'low-end,' as is typically used in NWS tornado reports.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "As the cyclone reached the western periphery of the ridge that steered it across the Atlantic for all of its existence..." Are you sure that the ridge was responsible for all of its motion? Case in point in the MH: "On August 31, the anticyclone near Bermuda caused Danielle to curve northeastward, away from the East Coast of the United States."
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...a peak intensity equivalent to that of a Category 2 hurricane." since the SSHWS was already in usage I would cut out the 'equivalent' part.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...but for a final time attained intensified..." Use either attained or intensified, but not both.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...considered a tropical cyclones..." One storm was no longer considered a plural form of its own self? TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 01:30, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
Meteorological history edit
- "The origins of Hurricane Danielle track back to a tropical wave..." I think you intended 'trace' and not 'track,' as I don't think the usage of track is appropriate in this context.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "Tracking west-northwestward, the National Hurricane Center (NHC) began Dvorak satellite intensity estimates later that morning following the consolidation of convection..." You should link the Dvorak satellite intensity part.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...southern periphery of the Azores HIgh..." Holding the shift key a little bit too long there?
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...periphery of an anticyclone..." Please link anticyclone.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "Despite an apparently favorable environment..." You should add 'being in' between 'despite' and 'an' since the storm was located there at the time.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...reconnaissance aircraft suggest that Danielle was beginning to intensify." Wrong tense-usage of 'suggest.'
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "...as a shortwave trough located..." Link shortwave.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "Danielle reached its minimum barometric pressure of 960 mbar (28 inHg)..." Please do not use the convert template for pressures, since it rounds the inches of mercury units to the nearest ones - 960 mbar is 28.35inHg. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 01:30, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
Preparations and impact edit
- "...this was later cancelled after Danielle passed northeast of the island." According to the meteorological history and TCR itself, this was cancelled after Danielle passed northwest of the island.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "The outerbands of Danielle..." Space missing between 'outer' and 'bands.'
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "Hurricane Bonnie ripped an artificial reef composed of tires offshore Atlantic Beach, North Carolina in late August. Danielle washed numerous loose tires ashore, especially on Emerald Isle." What is the purpose of the first sentence? The second sentence is sufficient by itself, though you could probably merge some of the locational information from the first sentence to the second.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "waves heights..." You mean 'wave heights.'
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- "An 11 year old boy..." Could use a hyphen.
- Done. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
References and Other Notes edit
- The Storm Data Reference (#19) is a dead link. TheAustinMan(Talk·Works) 01:30, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
- Fixed. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)
Thanks for the review. TropicalAnalystwx13 (talk) 01:51, 25 April 2013 (UTC)