Talk:Hurricane Adrian (2011)

Todo

Needs copyedit and more impact. iPhoneHurricane95 20:42, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

There is no more impact available and the writing is very good. The MH should be trimed though. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 20:51, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

The MH is good as it is right now, I don't think a trim is necessary. Again, I could be wrong, but I doubt that there is excessive content in the MH. Adrian did have a rather unique synopsis. - HurricaneSpin (Talk) 22:06, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

For the MH, you need the following things

• Adding African origins would be nice. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• It is not noted in the TCR, so I have to dig through old SA charts.

• "It subsequently acquired enough sufficiently organized structure to be recognized as an tropical cyclone and NHC initiated advisories on the newly formed tropical depression at around 1500 UTC, June 7.[5] Upon developing, the depression was designated as One-E about 365 mi (590 km) south of Acapulco, Mexico.[5]" merge these two sentence and no need for "around" here IMO. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done

• "Later that day, a well-defined eye formed beneath the CDO and cloud tops reached below −80 °C (−112 °F).[12] " how important is this? I'd remove it the layman has no idea what this means. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done Made an explanation.

• Not really done, just remove the sentence. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 00:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

• ", and the upper-level outflow showed no signs of wind shear.[15] " why mention this if there was no shear? YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• Because it meant that strengthening is likely.

• You mention why it intensified before in the article, so then, that's redudant. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:18, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done Ok, I reworded it.

• Use TCR for formation times and peak times. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• I will get to that later.

•  Done

• "During late that morning, convection associated with the Adrian had lessened and cloud tops warmed.[18]" cut the "cloud tops warmed" part as that is essentially the same thing. Also, change "During late that morning" to "Later that morning". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done

• " Adrian recurved to the west, traversing sea surface temperatures cooler than 26.5 °C (79.7 °F).[" you just mentioned it entered cooler waters above, so why are you mentioning it here. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done Removed the first mention.

• "Around 1500 UTC on June 11, Adrian weakened back into a tropical storm, something not expected to occur so quickly.[22] It was likely due to "an unexpectedly early increase of vertical wind shear coupled with marginal thermodynamics" as noted by the NHC.[22] " just combine these two sentences and make it simpler "Weakening faster than expected due to an unexpected increase in wind shear, Adrian weakened back into a tropical storm midday on June 11".

• I will get to that later.

•  Done

• "Soon enough, that evening, Adrian degenerated into a tight swirl of low-level clouds with very limited deep convection. [23]" this happenes every time an EPAC storms weakens, just axe this sentence. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• I can also argue that every EPac storm mentions storms being named and dissipating. It is still a part of the MH regardless.

• Try to merge it with another sentence. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 23:18, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• "Adrian still" why "still". I think "However, Adrian" is fine here. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done Reworded.

• "tip of Baja California.[26][27] " You mean the Baja California Peninsula here :P YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 22:26, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done

• Not done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 00:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

•  Done Oops, now it's done.

- HurricaneSpin (Talk) 23:11, 25 May 2013 (UTC)

• Check here as it has rainfall totals. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

• Can't seem to find it.

• ",thus there were no reports of damage or casualties as a result of Adrian" add the word "major" in front of "damage". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

•  Done

• I'd change "13 meters (4 ft)" to 4 ft (1.2 m).

•  Done

• Swap "Initially, NHC suggested slow weakening could occur due to progressively cooler water temperatures.[19]" with how Adrian was only forecasted to be a Cat 1 first. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

• This was after Adrian became a cat 1.

• "Throughout most of June 9, Adrian began transitioning into a annular hurricane, displaying an large eye around 25 miles (40 km) in diameter, circular in shape, and devoid of any convective banding.[17]" can you re-work this to just a large, circular, and cloud-free eye". YE ^{Pacific Hurricane}

•  Done The part about "devoid of any convective banding" was pointing at the rainbands, not cloud-free eye.

• Mention when it became a Cat 2 and 3. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 00:36, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

• Adrian RI'd, so I think that might be redundant.

- HurricaneSpin (Talk) 01:38, 26 May 2013 (UTC)

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