Talk:Hugh Downman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 21 October 2010 (UTC)

A nice article, very readable and informative and covers main points as far as I can tell. A few very minor things.

• "fighting off a larger vessel that attacked him" A bit clunky: what about fighting off an attack by a larger vessel?
• "performed services to the nobles and monarchs of the Italian states" Performed services for, maybe? What services did he perform?
• "Downman went on to serve in command of several ships of the line" Would it be better to say "commanded several ships of the line"?
• "flying the broad pennant" I would either find a link, explain it fully, or simply say "under the command".
• "He returned to England at the start of 1793 and with the commencement of the French Revolutionary Wars, Downman joined the 74-gun HMS Alcide and went out to the Mediterranean, where served with Commodore Linzee's squadron." Long sentence!
• "cut out a French gunboat" Maybe explain what this means.
• "when on 2 May he was ordered to strike his flag" Again, maybe explain.
• "paid off" Ditto.
• "Later years" seems a little short for a section. Maybe merge into another section? Only five sentences and three start with "he"!
• In family and legacy, single quotation marks are used. I may be wrong but I thought MoS says double quotation marks? But I'm rubbish at MoS so feel free to correct me.
• Sources seem fine (as far as I can tell), ditto refs. Ditton images. Could a few more images be added? E.g. Picture of Speedy?
• Dablinks and links good.
• Not at all a problem at GA, but some sections are a little shortish and may need expanding if you take this to FA.

I'll put it on hold, but don't imagine there will be any problems. --Sarastro1 (talk) 20:09, 21 October 2010 (UTC)

Issues addressed; thanks for the review. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 19:34, 23 October 2010 (UTC)