Talk:Hudson Terminal/GA1

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Epicgenius in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:48, 8 March 2021 (UTC)Reply


Comments

  • "Opened in 1908–1909 " seems odd, and you have "Opened July 19, 1909" in the infobox.
    •   Fixed The towers and stations opened at different times. I will add a building infobox later.
  • "and demolished in 1972" I would move this to the end of the lead. Oh, it's already there, just delete it from here.
    •   Done
  • ""traveling to and ... which traveled " repetitive.
    •   Done
  • "Third Rail"' -> "Third rail"
    •   Done
  • "assessed at $75,000, and " inflate?
    •   Done
  • "$164,917,431" probably "$165m" would be close enough!
    •   Done
  • "2019[b]).[17]" odd footnote/ref/) juxtaposition...
    • This was because the inflation footnote applies only to the parenthetical, not the rest of the sentence. The reference applies to the whole sentence.
  • "59,221,354 passengers per year" presumably that was in one year, not per year.
    • Yes, that was in one year. Also, it was repetitive for me to say "per year" so I removed it. Epicgenius (talk) 17:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "across the Hudson River.[39]" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • "new PATH station " I think that's the first time you mentioned PATH, what is it?
    •   Added Sometimes I forget that people aren't familiar with NYC area transit. Oops. Epicgenius (talk) 17:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "H&M trackage.[58][18]' order.
    •   Done
  • ""long[23][68] and could" move those awkward refs to the end of the sentence.
    •   Done
  • "northward[72] to what " similar.
    •   Done
  • "underneath Greenwich Street, which " overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • No need to link common terms like "architect".
    •   Removed
  • "contractor George A. Fuller.[21][13][61] " order.
    •   Done
  • No need to link "brick".
    •   Removed
  • Not sure why but our article on Indiana limestone has Limestone as the title capitalisation.
    • I don't know why that's the case, either. It should really be lowercase. Epicgenius (talk) 17:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • "4,500 tons of terracotta" short tons? You have converted other such units.
    •   Done
  • Could you link psf? It's something I've not seen used, obviously psi (for my tyres) but not psf.
    •   Done
  • "historians Sarah Landau an" overlinked.
    •   Removed
  • ",400 pounds per square foot" you've already used the abbreviation so why go back to the full term?
    •   Fixed I moved the link and full term to the first usage of psf.
  • Ref 9 and ref 40 have a " -- " which should be an en-dash.
    •   Done

That's it. A typically excellent article, just a few tiny tweaks. On hold, cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 16:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

@The Rambling Man: Thanks for the review and the kind words. I've addressed all these points now. Epicgenius (talk) 17:08, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
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