Talk:HolbyBlue/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by ElectrodeandtheAnode in topic GA Review

GA Review edit

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 17:53, 26 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):  
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:  

General edit

  • The en dash must be replaced with an ordinary hyphen for words such as "newly−proposed" and "most−watched" for example.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 19:22, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Lead edit

  • "HolbyBlue (also known as Holby Blue) is a British police procedural drama series, which aired from 2007 to 2008 on BBC One – on Tuesday nights in 2007 and Thursday nights in 2008." - The latter part of this sentence should be removed from the lead.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 10:24, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
@MWright96: quick question (just want to make sure I get rid of the right bit first time), is it everything in bold you would like removed? ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:02, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
@ElectrodeandtheAnode: Yes, should have made that point more clearer. MWright96 (talk) 10:21, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Remove the duplicate wikilinks of Zöe Lucker, Kacey Ainsworth and Jimmy Akingbola in the bottom paragraph.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:08, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "Times critic David Chater" - Change this to David Chater from the same newspaper. Also do the same in the critical reception sub-section.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:08, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Plot edit

  • "Kate is then hired as a receptionist at the police station," - employed   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "Kate hands in her resignation, but John manages to convince Kate to remain at the police station." - Kate tenders her resignation, but John manages to convince her to remain at the police station   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "John and Luke rescue Kate and the children, but are shot in the process. They both survive." - John and Luke rescue Kate and the children; athough they are shot in the process, they both survive.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "learns of Lucy's boyfriend's criminal reputation and forces the pair to break up." - separate   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "It later transpires that John's father was jailed for abusing prostitutes." -imprisoned   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:12, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Ratings edit

  • "Despite a decreased 23% audience share," - Despite a 23% decrease in audience share,   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:16, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • "viewership had declined 4.10 million and a 21% audience share," - viewership had declined to 4.10 million and a 21% audience share   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:16, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Accolades edit

  • "During its lifespan, HolbyBlue was nominated for six awards, of which it won zero." - reword to HolbyBlue was nominated for six awards during its lifespan, of which it failed to win any.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:18, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
    • To add: "HolbyBlue" should be in italics as it is the name of the show. Soaper1234 - talk 21:00, 27 October 2017 (UTC)   Done - thank you for pointing that out Soaper1234, I completely forgot to italicise the word. ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 23:14, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

References edit

  • All of The Times references lead to the homepage of The Times Literary Supplement rather than the designated article. Please find an archive link for them.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 11:40, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
  • Do the same for the two The Stage citations that have not been archived.   Done ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 20:47, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

Going to put this review on hold until the reviewer has addressed the issues put forward. MWright96 (talk) 18:28, 27 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

All issues addressed edit

@MWright96: I believe have addressed all the issues put forward. ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 11:41, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply

@ElectrodeandtheAnode: Yes you have. Can now promote to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 12:21, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
Fantastic! Thank you very much for taking the time to review the article. ElectrodeandtheAnode (talk) 12:31, 28 October 2017 (UTC)Reply
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