Talk:Henry Dewar (rugby union)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ProKro (talk · contribs) 16:19, 22 July 2015 (UTC)

Lead

• "There he captained..." – "There, he captained..." (Comma)

• Done. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• "The following day he was killed in action." – "He was killed in action the following day." (Either work; more common wording)

• I prefer to keep as it is, if that's ok. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Sure thing. ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Rugby career

• "In 1908 he was a member..." – "In 1908, he was a member..." (Comma)

• OK. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

1913 Season

• "On 6 September 1913..." – On 6 September 1913,... (Comma)

• OK. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Military career

• "24 hours later on 9 August 1915,..." – "Twenty-four hours later on 9 August 1915,..." (While not strictly incorrect, majority of Stylebooks and Manuals of Style recommend starting a sentence with a number written out rather than in its the numerical form; in this case 24.)

• Absolutely. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

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Article is concise and focused with only a few minor spelling and/or syntactic errors. Text is easy to read, it is interesting and engaging.

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   All concerns addressed. Y

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   References are few but reliable and verifiable. Y

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

   Neutral Y

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   There are no copyvios or other issues. Y

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Additional comments

• While not as prominent as in the Albert Downing and Arthur James Dingle articles, there are some chiefly British/New Zealand English spelling preferences, so I'd suggest putting the New Zealand English tag in the article's talk page.

• Tagged British. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Same as with the other articles, I'd suggest changing the date format.

• I prefer to keep British English date format for consistency, if that's ok. FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

• Noted. Discuss over at Albert Downing/GA1. ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)

Just as with Albert Downing, it's an easy pass. As soon as the issues are addressed, the article'll be good-to-go. If you have any questions, feel free to ask. ProKro (talk) 22:16, 25 July 2015 (UTC)

Thank you very much for all three of these! FunkyCanute (talk) 13:17, 27 July 2015 (UTC)

Sure thing and congratulations! Pass ProKro (talk) 00:17, 28 July 2015 (UTC)