Talk:Harold North/GA1

Latest comment: 2 years ago by Pickersgill-Cunliffe in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Will review shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 22 September 2022 (UTC)Reply

Prelim

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  • No edit wars
  • No duplicated links (bar postnom)
  • Images correctly licensed
  • Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

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  • Link sortie
  • Link dogfight
  • Could mention in the lede that he later flies Spitfires, right now it suggests that he only flew Hurricanes
  • Don't believe nicknames need to be italicized
  • Operation Dynamo could be added to the infobox, being separate to the BoB
  • His service number (in LGs etc) can be added to infobox

Early life

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  • Barrister and solicitor are different roles, why do they have the same link?
  • Why was his acceptance provisional?
  • You link the "civilian flying school" to RAF Prestwick which doesn't immediately make sense
  • You've left the "RAF" before Uxbridge, which I think is against your usual practice
  • "More advanced flying training followed" Why not include location(s) for this training too?

Second World War

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  • "The squadron was based at Scapa Flow" I was a little confused when reading this (aren't they at Acklington?); suggest rewording sentence to begin with the date of move
  • "the following month it was back at Tangmere" The article does not make it obvious that the squadron had moved away from Tangmere in this period, which is what I assume this means
  • Not clear what "a section" would be - is this a flight?
  • Did North see any operational flying with 96 Sqn?
  • Probably but the sources don't explicitly say. I've add mention of a course that he attended during his time there.
  • Practice suggests you should add what bombers he was escorting, if possible
  • Could be useful to expand on the tally uncertainty - which kills are the dodgy ones?

References

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  • References look good.

@Zawed: Hi, that's my initial run through completed. Will await replies. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:40, 2 October 2022 (UTC)Reply

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe:, thanks for the detailed review. I have responded to your various points above, and this is ready for you to take another look. Thanks again, Zawed (talk) 09:23, 3 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
@Zawed: Looks good. My only quibble is that the service number needs a reference. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 17:12, 3 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
Done, I added mention of it in the main body rather than cite it only in the infobox. Zawed (talk) 08:49, 4 October 2022 (UTC)Reply
Happy to pass this article as satisfying the GA criteria. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 16:03, 4 October 2022 (UTC)Reply