Talk:Halo: Cryptum/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 07:06, 7 April 2013 (UTC)

As a Greg Bear fan and a Halo fan both, I'll be glad to take this one, though I haven't read the novel itself. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks in advance for your work on this one. -- Khazar2 (talk) 07:06, 7 April 2013 (UTC)

Initial comments

Okay, this looks extremely solid and ripe for promotion. Overall, it's well written, well sourced, and appears comprehensive. I only have a few quibbles, mostly noting a bit of additional context for the non-gamer, which I've noted below. I also made some tweaks as I went; please check to be sure I haven't inadvertently introduced any error, and feel free to revert anything you disagree with. -- Khazar2 (talk) 01:33, 9 April 2013 (UTC)

• For context, it might be helpful to point out that the Halo universe is based primarily on (or began with) the video games. Perhaps the first sentence could be rephrased as "set in the universe of the Halo video game series"? -- Khazar2 (talk) 21:22, 8 April 2013 (UTC)
• " taking them on a quest given the Librarian who has provided them a state-of-the-art space ship" -- should this be "given by"? -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:27, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
• " the Flood " -- explain briefly what the Flood is. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:27, 9 April 2013 (UTC)
• diff - I believe I've addressed these. Your edits introduced no errors (but eliminated some that I should have caught myself!). Thanks! James086^Talk 06:19, 9 April 2013 (UTC)

Checklist

Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.	See minor points above. Spotchecks show no evidence of copyright issues.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.	Pass