Talk:Hallucination (song)/GA1
Latest comment: 1 year ago by Kyle Peake in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 06:18, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
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This one shouldn't take long at all! --K. Peake 06:18, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
Infobox and lead edit
Keep the note in the infobox so it is know this was on the streaming version only, but add (deluxe) after the album title"British band Years & Years. It was included on the" → "British band Years & Years from the""and wrote it with" → "and served as a co-writer with"Imany should not be linked twice in the lead; either do it on the first occasion or the second, depending on whether the reference or her being mentioned by name is more important""Hallucination" is a 80's-inspired" → "it is a 80's-inspired"Pipe four-on-the-floor to Four on the floor (music)"with its lyrics" → "with the lyrics""received widespread acclaim" → "received generally positive reviews" per the body"lyrics, nature as well as" → "lyrics and nature as well as Years & Years's"Are you sure the link on Commonwealth of Independent States is needed?
Background and composition edit
"and wrote it with" → "and co-wrote it with"Pipe four-on-the-floor to Four on the floor (music)Again, should Imany be linked on the first or second instance?Why have you written that it contains an interpolation when all the sources mention a sample?"all of its facets." → "all of the facets."[10] has no usage after the quote; shouldn't you invoke [6] instead since that mentions it like [9] does?
Reception edit
- Any thematic order here for the reviews?
The Wyspa.fm source uses the word flawlessly, rather than unabashedly"writing that "['the song'] is a perfect track" → "writing that it "is a perfect song" per the source's wordingAre you sure the link on Commonwealth of Independent States is needed?Mention that the position in New Zealand was on the New Zealand Hot Singles Chart"as well as number 28 on" → "and number 28 on"
Promotion edit
Per both being one para, couldn't you merge this with the above section and retitle to Reception and promotion?"For promotion, an accompanying music video for" → "For promotion, a music video for"- What do you mean by overview of the latter and where is the part of the sentence after the comma sourced?
I'm not sure if you should use the term "observers" when only one source is invokedItalicise Black MirrorItalicise Squid GamePrzemysław Kokot's surname should only be used since you introduced him previously"to an 1980s-inspired" → "to an 80s-inspired" per the source's wording
Track listing edit
Shouldn't the track listings for the original and remixes be separated?
Charts edit
Weekly charts edit
Are you sure Commonwealth of Independent States should be linked?Remove Dance/Mix Show Airplay per WP:USCHARTS
Monthly charts edit
- Good
Release history edit
- Good
Notes edit
- Good
References edit
- Copyvio score looks decent at 38.7%
Why does ref 6 cite New Musical Express instead of just NME when that is what the publication is called nowadays?Remove or replace ref 10 since that is an unreliable source owned by UniversalCite Promo News as publisher instead on ref 29Only cite BBC on ref 32 with the wikilinkWP:OVERLINK of TopHit on ref 42
Final comments and verdict edit
- On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 07:55, 11 September 2022 (UTC)
- Hey @Kyle Peake: thank you for picking up the review. I've responded to all of your concerns above. Cheers! Iaof2017 (talk) 13:07, 12 September 2022 (UTC)
- ✓ Pass now, top job on this! --K. Peake 08:18, 13 September 2022 (UTC)