Talk:Half-Decent Proposal/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Ruby2010 comment! 15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

I will review soon. Ruby2010 comment! 15:47, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Comments

• One dab link
• "the tenth episode The Simpsons' thirteenth season." missing word
• "was pitched by seres' co-creator and executive producer" typo
• "tensions among The Simpsons' staff" apostrophe not needed
• "some of who conidered it" typo
• Make sure first mentions of Lenny and Springfield are wikilinked
• "All cacti resemble Marge to Homer, and Lenny mournfully points out Mount Carlmore that he carved one blissful summer." Not sure I understand the second part of this sentence. Lenny carved Mount Carlmore?
• "Meanwhile, Marge leaves Artie furiously, only to discover what Homer had done when she gets home and finds he is not there and that he had left a tape behind." You can probably delete the second part of this sentence (bolded). Or reword (verging on run-on sentence currently)
• "and anti-Homer subliminal messages (though Artie seems to reveal himself soon after the messages start and wakes up Marge)." Don't quite understand this sentence either. How does Artie reveal himself?
• Indicate Tim Long is a consulting producer
• " This revalation garnered scrutiny" typo
• Make sure sentences with direct quotes end with citations
• ""Half-Decent Proposal" features the return of Artie Ziff, and the first time since the season 2 episode "The Way We Was" that the character was portrayed by American comedian Jon Lovitz." awkward phrasing
• "On August 24, 2010, the episode was released part of The Simpsons: The Complete Thirteenth Season DVD and Blu-ray set. Al Jean, Ian Maxtone-Graham, Matt Selman, Tim Long, Dan Castellaneta, Lauren MacMullan, Matt Warburton and James Lipton participated in the audio commentary of the episode." Needs citation (just use audio commentary citations here too)
• "manages to be worse that that dire movie [Indecent Proposal]." typo on your part, or author's? (maybe add [sic]?)
• "calling the it "late to the party." missing word
• "The Simpsons makes an Indecent Proposal themed episode" make sure The Simpsons and Indecent Proposal are italicized
• Format publishers considently (use IGN for instance, not tv.ign.com)

The article is well-researched and interesting, but has a lot of grammar mistakes. They're mostly all easy fixes, so I'll place the review on hold for seven days while they are addressed. Thanks, Ruby2010 comment! 16:18, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

Thanks! I think I've addressed all concerns but if there's anything more, let me know. Thanks again! Queenieacoustic (talk) 17:12, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

• Looks good. Almost forgot, but make sure to add a brief ratings summary to lead. Then it will be all set for gaining a GA ranking. Thanks, Ruby2010 comment! 17:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

Done. Queenieacoustic (talk) 19:07, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

• Looks great. Nice work! Pass for GA. Ruby2010 comment! 19:21, 1 June 2011 (UTC)