Talk:HSwMS Äran/GA1
Latest comment: 9 months ago by Simongraham in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 00:12, 24 January 2024 (UTC)
I got this one.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:12, 24 January 2024 (UTC)
- Image appropriately licensed
- Consider moving the gun performance and statistics to the class article from this article and all her sisters. Otherwise the only significance between the ship and class design and development sections will be possibly a bit more background on the their genesis.
- This is a very reasonable point as it seems that the class article needs work. However, I feel it is important to give a complete background to avoid the need to click away from the article. I suggest that there is space for both.
- repaired, at Hårsfjärden Is the comma necessary?
- The previous work may not have happened at Hårsfjärden, as the sources do not say. Clarified.
- The ship's low silouette and 14 Something's missing and something else is misspelled
- Oops. Removed.
- You use "taken out of service twice in the last para for two different, but related things. I'd suggest that you replace the first usage with "hulked and converted into a floating barracks" or somesuch.
- Clarified.
- I don't see any usage of Insulander--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 20:52, 27 January 2024 (UTC)
- Added reference.
@Sturmvogel 66: Thank you for this. I have also adjusted the infobox in light of your comments on the last GA review. Please take a look at my changes and tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 01:34, 29 January 2024 (UTC)