Talk:HMS Whelp (R37)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 03:13, 11 November 2016 (UTC)

Will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk  • mail) 03:13, 11 November 2016 (UTC)

• Section 1; paras 1&2; Everything good with these sections. Consistency is maintained, conversions and units are in place, all links and citations seem fine.
• Section 1; para 3; Please mention what is need to defend the ships against the Japanese aircraft specifically. Is there any conflict going on between the UK and Japan, I know it is the Second World War, but sometimes a reader may not get a thought of why was the modification needed.
  • I reworked the lede to emphasize that they were fighting the Japanese.
• Section 2.1; para 1; Everything is good.
• Section 2.1; para 2; sentence 1; A comma (,) after "By October"
• Section 2.1; para 2; "The BPF was formed a few days afterwards"; The "BPF" is never defined in the previous sentences. Please mention the full abbreviation here as it is the first mention in the article, and use the abbreviation from the next mention.
• Section 2.1; para 3; Link "invasion of Okinawa" to Battle of Okinawa.
  • Good catch.
• Section 2.1; para 3; De-link "Wager", it was already linked in the second para.
• Section 2.1; para 3; "damaged carrier Illustrious"; Please mention clearly that it was an aircraft carrier to strike off ambiguity with helicopter carriers.
  • Aircraft carriers are the only types mentioned in the article.
• Section 2.1; para 4; I think the "CinC" must be "C-in-C", the standard way.
• Section 2.1; para 4; "U.S. Admiral Chester Nimitz, the American Commander in Chief Pacific Fleet Headquarters"; In this sentence "the American Commander" may be replaced with just "the Commander" because, prior it is mentioned that he was an U.S. Admiral, so probably he would be an American.
• Good idea.
• Section 2.2; para 1; De-link the dup-link of the rank "Commander"
• Section 2.2; para 1; "M.R. Terry-Lloyd" must be "M. R. Terry-Lloyd" per MOS:INITIALS
• Section 2.2; para 1; What is "SAN"? The abbreviation is never defined earlier or anywhere in the para.
  • Added to the lede.

@Sturmvogel 66: Have a look over the issues raised. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 10:44, 15 November 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:35, 19 November 2016 (UTC)

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GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 01:18, 20 November 2016 (UTC)