Talk:HMS Ocean (1898)

GA Review

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Reviewer: Adityavagarwal (talk · contribs) 19:20, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Onto it! Would be making straight forward changes as I go, so please feel free to revert if I make any mistake. I hope you enjoy the review. Adityavagarwal (talk) 19:20, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks, I appreciate you taking the time! Parsecboy (talk) 22:51, 27 October 2017 (UTC)

• Perhaps we could expand the lead a teeny bit more? It can be ignored too, but just an opinion!

• why are we having a dash in "12-inch"?
  • Because "12-inch" is a compound adjective
• To be consistent, I think it would be better to chose either inch or in.
  • Done
• "in August 1914" is it in 1910?
  • I'm not sure what you're asking

• Ok, so ignore this comment. I am unsure too, of what I typed... I think I mis-typed something!

• Link East Asia.
  • Done
• "was protected with 6 in", "had 12 in" convert template for 6 in and 12 in!
  • Removed
• Devonport should be linked at first mention.
  • Fixed
• Link Royal Navy in body.
  • Done
• "in late February 1915" later we have the mention of 28 february. So, is the first event sure to be antedating the second one? This is because by "late", we still do not know the date!
  • Yeah, Burt doesn't give a specific date, unfortunately.
• "4 March" is it 1915?
  • Yeah

• Would it not be better to also mention the year? This is because it is the start of a new paragraph, and just two lines below it we have an event of 1914. Adityavagarwal (talk) 18:15, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

• How about changing that "in 1914" to "the previous year"? Parsecboy (talk) 18:20, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

• Yup, that is cool too! :D Adityavagarwal (talk) 18:26, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

• Mention years "7 March" and "18 March" too,to provide a clear picture of the timeframes!
  • In general, it's not appropriate to include years in a narrative like this, especially when we're talking about the span of a few weeks.

parsecboy This is all what I could find! Adityavagarwal (talk) 11:30, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

Thanks for your review! Parsecboy (talk) 18:09, 30 October 2017 (UTC)

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Regarding my contributions

​How have you come to the conclusion that the source I added isn’t reliable? It was used on the article Seyit Çabuk, HMS Ocean was struck by an artillery shell before striking a mine. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 22:31, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

Look at the site; it's clearly an amateur project. Parsecboy (talk) 22:35, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

​ The event actually happened, I’m not on a stable connection right now but just search “Seyit Çabuk” on the web, he fired 3 shots at HMS Ocean and partially disabled it causing it to strike a mine. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 22:39, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

​The site is reliable, it’s amateur appearance has nothing to do with reliability. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 22:40, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

You didn't read WP:RS, did you? I strongly suggest you do. As to the site, no, it's not reliable. For it to be considered reliable, it would have to be produced by experts in the field. Since the site does not disclose the identity of it's author, we can only conclude that it's a hobbyist site, and thus, not usable. Parsecboy (talk) 00:25, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

Sorry if I’m being annoying, I’m trying to get a better connection and it’s putting a lot of stess on me. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 22:52, 23 April 2020 (UTC)

It's no problem, there's no deadline to get anything done here. Parsecboy (talk) 00:25, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

@Rodrigo Valequez: - the source you added appears to be a news site. Can you improve the reference with the {{cite news}} template? It looks like it has a byline and a date of publication, but I don't read Turkish and don't entirely trust Google Translate for this sort of thing. Also, can you provide a translated title with the |trans-title= parameter? Parsecboy (talk) 12:24, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

​ I’ll get it done as soon as possible, I’ll add the translated title but I won’t be able to add byline and date of publication today. I’m repairing my computer and I can’t contribute as well on mobile, thanks! Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 18:37, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

I’m having some issues with the template, could I translate the title for you to add the template? The title translates to “Who was Corporal Seyit? How much did the shell he lifted weigh?”, the second part actually translates to “How many kilos was the shell lifted by Koca Seyit?“ but I don’t think it would be suitable because of it’s length. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 18:55, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

I've added the translated title to the article - I was actually going to suggest you posting the translation here if you weren't able to add it to the template, but you beat me to it. Thanks. Parsecboy (talk) 17:29, 25 April 2020 (UTC)

Also, I’ve read WP:RS before, I assumed the source was reliable because that’s what most Turkish-made websites look like (We aren’t the best coders). I’ve been making minor edits as an IP for the past 3 years and I haven’t gotten the hang of citing. Rodrigo Valequez^(🗣) 19:01, 24 April 2020 (UTC)

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