Talk:HMS Moresby/GA1
Latest comment: 3 years ago by Simongraham in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 11:29, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- "previous L-class destroyer, capable" destroyer overlinked.
- Done.
- "First War Construction Programme" this sounds notable, should we redlink it for an article?
- None of the programmes have articles yet. This could be a nice task for someone.
- "The destroyer was..." last destroyer you mentioned was the rumoured German one.
- Thank you. I have clarified this.
- "displacement was" capital D.
- Good spot.
- Link long tons, unusual unit.
- Done.
- "shaft horsepower" link.
- Done.
- "296 long tons" avoid starting sentence with numeral.
- Reworded.
- "torpedoes.[5]The ship" space.
- Done.
- Could link complement to Ship's company.
- Wikilinked.
- "changed to Moresby.[8] The new name honoured" -> "changed to Moresby to honour"
- Done.
- "the Grand Fleet, joining" overlinked.
Done.
- "in what would be the" in the.
Done.
- "protect the battlecruisers of the Fleet" -> "of the Grand Fleet"
- Done.
- "the reconnaissance seaplane had been recovered" I missed this happening...
- Sentence added.
- "rejoined the Flotilla and" flotilla unless you use the full formal title.
- Fixed.
- "German High Seas Fleet. The two" overlinked.
- Removed.
- "after 1710 on " make it clear it's the time, i.e. 17:10 or 1710 hours or whatever MOS:TIME suggests.
- Done.
- "and at 2:15 turned" same. Is that 02:15, 2:15pm??
- Done
- "to Buncrana with" where??
- Clarified.
- Could convoy escort be linked to Escort Group?
- I do not think it was not so formal then.
- Changed.
- Pennant number table, no reason to capitalise Number, and row/col scopes would be much appreciated for accessibility.
- Fixed.
- Ref 11, 12, should just be p.
- Fixed.
That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 19:43, 3 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: Thank you. I have amended the article. Please tell me if there is anything else. simongraham (talk) 23:01, 3 September 2021 (UTC)