Talk:HMS Cornwall (1902)

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:HMS Cornwall (1902)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 17:16, 7 April 2016 (UTC)

Will finish this soon. JAGUAR  17:16, 7 April 2016 (UTC)

Initial comments

• This is minor, but I would usually recommend cutting the red links in the lead. I don't know if it's an actual part of WP:LEAD but it usually looks better without red links. Feel free to ignore
• "She captured a German merchant ship days after the beginning of World War I in August 1914" - link World War I
• "and was then sent to the Central Atlantic" - is 'central' meant to be capitalised?
  • Yes, like North Atlantic often is.
• "The armour of the gun turrets and their barbettes was 4 inches thick" - convert to metric
  • Linked on first use.
• "She was now assigned to the North Atlantic and West Indies Station[21] and she began escorting convoys between North America and Britain on 19 September" - get rid of "she" here, might read better without it
  • Agreed
• "Cornwall spent much of the rest of the month searching for the German ships that hadn't yet been captured" - had not
• No dead links
• "The ship was later assigned to a new squadron intended to patrol the River Plate" - River Plate is a dab link
• The external links section is empty

On hold until all of the above can be addressed. Once again, this is a well written compact article. JAGUAR  11:08, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for looking this over. Happy to offer more material to increase your lead reviewing GANs for the Welsh contest ;-) I think that I've responded to all of your comments, see if they satisfy.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 14:32, 8 April 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for addressing them, I've gone through the article and this should be good to go. You keep lobbing them in, I'll keep reviewing them! JAGUAR  22:07, 8 April 2016 (UTC)