Talk:HMS Black Prince (1904)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Starstriker7 (talk · contribs) 08:34, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

I'll do this review. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 08:34, 11 December 2011 (UTC)

Criterion 1

• "with all hands being killed." - I think you can nix the "being".
• "1902–03 Naval Estimates, the first ships to be designed for the Royal Navy under the supervision of the new Director of Naval Construction" - The sentence to which this belongs in the Design and description section runs rather long. You can probably split it somewhere between "Estimates" and "the first ships" and adding a "These were" after "the first ships."
• "participated in the Pursuit of Goeben and Breslau" - Despite the wikilink, "Pursuit" should be decapitalized.
• I presume that the Istria and Südmark should probably not be wikilinked?
  • I don't know what kind of engines they had and that makes a difference when building the link.
• "join a squadron of French and British ship to search for" - missed an "s" off of "ships".
• "engaged by German battleships and battlecruisers, Defence blowing up and Warrior receiving heavy damage, which later caused her to sink" - Add a "with" before "Defense".
• "The wreck was briefly surveyed by nautical archaeologist Innes McCartney in 2000 and 2001. It was discovered that the stern of the wreck is upsidedown" - A dash belongs inside "upsidedown". Also, can Innes McCartney be wiklinked?
• Since a large portion of the Operational history section focuses on the ship's demise, can it be segregated into subsections?

All done, thanks for the review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 03:05, 13 December 2011 (UTC)

Yup. Passing the article now. --Starstriker7^(Talk) 03:11, 13 December 2011 (UTC)