Talk:HMS Active (1911)/GA1
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Jaguar in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 20:10, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
Reviewing now. JAGUAR 20:10, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments edit
- "When the First World War began in August of that year" - link First World War
- The lead summarises the article perfectly, but I would recommend splitting it into two paragraphs
- "On 1 September, a submarine was spotted inside Scapa Flow and the 2nd DF was detailed to hunt down the imaginary submarine" - imaginary? Does this mean to say that the submarine wasn't really there?
- Yep, German records confirm that no u-boat was present. This early in the war, both sides tended to see submarines everywhere.
- "As scout cruisers, the ships were only lightly protected to maximize their speed" - maximise
- "She only fired eight 4-inch rounds during the entire battle" - convert to metric
- Already done on first use.
- No dead links
- "by Lady Herbert, wife of Major-general Ivor Herbert, MP" - MP is a dab link
A short review, but very little issues to bring up. Once all are done this can pass. 
JAGUAR 20:21, 13 April 2016 (UTC)
- All done, thanks for the quick review.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:40, 14 April 2016 (UTC)