Talk:HD 154672/GA1

Latest comment: 12 years ago by Wizardman in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman (talk contribs count) 18:26, 4 September 2011 (UTC)Reply

Here are the issues I found:

  • "It is about 65 parsecs away from the Sun that is larger, but of a similar mass, as the Sun; it is, however, much older." and is larger; confusing as worded now.
  • "Originally, HD 154672 was flagged as home to such a short-orbit "Hot Jupiter,"" the 'such a' part throws the sentence off, not positive what it's trying to say.
  • "HD 143672, however, is far" rm however here, was getting a bit overused.

Article will be put on hold and passed when fixed. Wizardman Operation Big Bear 18:26, 4 September 2011 (UTC)Reply