Talk:Greef Karga/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 15:06, 23 April 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks for taking on another review, The Rambling Man! — Hunter Kahn 16:41, 26 April 2020 (UTC)
Comments
- "the Bounty Hunters' Guild," always a bit odd to "part link" a "formal title". I would unlink and go for linking bounty hunter at the next chance.
- " in a handful of episodes" curious about this as there's only been a handful of episodes of the whole show! Four episodes really is still a handful!
- "ensures everyone follows" not everyone, just bounty hunters. Presumably "ensures its members follow"?
- "so far" is a little like WP:CURRENTLY. Maybe "as of the end of the first season"?
- What's a cantina?
- "a big job" seems a little informal...
- "who insists of meeting " ENGVAR? insists on meeting?
- "the Force " the should be inside the pipe.
- Fixed. — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
- Lots of triple-referencing going on, per WP:CITEKILL any chance of reducing it a little?
- "him.[20][17][21] " ref order.
- I think you've linked "stormtroopers" in other similar articles.
- ""Chapter 8: Redemption"" you've already linked this as the season's "finale".
- "The character is slated to return..." well Weathers has said he's definitely in it so isn't it stronger than slated?
- "Actor Carl Weathers said..." no need to reintroduce Weathers here.
- Particularly as you have "Weathers has described his " in the previous sentence.
- Oops, yeah, lol.
- "and Carl Weathers has" no need for Carl here.
- "2019,[45][46] According" should be a period.
- "showrunner Jon Favreau " both overlinked. And both overlinked in the caption too.
- "enjoys" tense?
- " series, and in " one too many run-ons. Split here.
- "Weathers said ... Weathers performed... Weathers said " repetitive.
- "study the different energies the director and actors brought" feels whimsical, can this be "quoted" rather than written in Wikipedia voice?
- "particular enjoyed" +ly
- " with "The Client", " -> "with the Client"
- "Screen Rant ranked" overlinked.
- "performance of Carl Weathers, " no need for Carl.
That's all I have so I'll put it on hold for now. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 10:45, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
- Thanks again The Rambling Man! I'll try to take care of that WP:CITEKILL issue tomorrow and then I think we'll be all set unless you had anything else... — Hunter Kahn 05:27, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
- Hunter Kahn No, I have nothing more. Give me a ping when you're ready for a final run-through. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:04, 30 April 2020 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man I believe I've addressed the WP:CITEKILL issue you had raised (most of the examples of three citations were ones in which I could simply remove one because it was just reinforcing information from the other two) so I think that addresses everything you had now, but let me know if you had any other thoughts or comments. Thanks! — Hunter Kahn 21:26, 1 May 2020 (UTC)
- All good, thanks for your hard work. I'm promoting. I'll hopefully pick up another of your nominations in due course! Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 21:34, 1 May 2020 (UTC)
- The Rambling Man I believe I've addressed the WP:CITEKILL issue you had raised (most of the examples of three citations were ones in which I could simply remove one because it was just reinforcing information from the other two) so I think that addresses everything you had now, but let me know if you had any other thoughts or comments. Thanks! — Hunter Kahn 21:26, 1 May 2020 (UTC)
- Hunter Kahn No, I have nothing more. Give me a ping when you're ready for a final run-through. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay indoors, stay safe!!!!) 08:04, 30 April 2020 (UTC)