Talk:Gordon Ramsay Plane Food/GA1

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Reviewer: Moswento (talk · contribs) 09:17, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• Hello! I'll have a look at this one today or tomorrow. Moswento ^talky 09:17, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Overall

• Overall, this is a great article - well-research, well-written, comprehensive, balanced and mouth-watering. Nothing seems to be missing, the sources are all used appropriately, and the picture licenses check out. I have a few minor comments on the text, and then I'll be pleased to promote this to GA. Good stuff! Moswento ^talky 11:29, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "£2 million" - "Description" says £2.5 million, I see no reason to round down further here

• Corrected - also made me reason that I'd placed a cite a sentence early as the £2.5 in the description wasn't actually cited. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Description

• "can access the restaurant. The restaurant" - repetition of "The restaurant" is a bit awkward

• Changed the second "restaurant" to "Plane Food". Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Menu

• "There are up to four choices for each of three courses which comes packaged in a cool box." - The second half of this doesn't quite follow. I would just add the word "cool" into the previous sentence, and end this sentence after "courses"

• Done. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

History

• "open upon the opening" - The repetition makes this sounds awkward. "launch upon the opening"?

• Changed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "due to the requirements for speed of dining and the volume of single diners due to the location within" - The two "due to" makes this a cumbersome sentence. Perhaps move the location further up in the sentence. "His 2010 opening, Bread Street Kitchen, was based on the same concept as Plane Food, as its location within the One New Change office and retail development created a similar need to cater for quick dining and a high volume of single diners"?

• Changed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

Reception

• In the sea bream caption, why is "Sea Bream" capitalised?

• Corrected. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "and was too expensive for those travelling in economy." - this doesn't quite follow, as the subject of the verb is "quality of food". "but the pricing was too expensive for those travelling in economy"?

• I split it into two sentences and worded very similar to the suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "didn't care for the vegetable accompaniments." - "didn't care for" seems a bit too informal to my ears.

• Changed it to "like" (I would have used "enjoy", but I'd used it in the previous sentence). Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "it difficult to believe the food was inside an airport due to the normal expectation of food at such a venue." - this is quite an unwieldy way of saying it. Perhaps "finding it difficult to believe that food of such good quality was being served inside an airport".

• Changed as suggested. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "saying that "tuck into a smoked salmon and cream cheese sandwich with apple and walnut salad was a delight"." - the "saying that" doesn't lead into the quote. Perhaps you meant to add a "to" here?

• Yep, I did. I've added it now. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "But said that the Croque monsieur was bland and didn't like the lack of a drink" - this sentence doesn't stand alone as it is. Perhaps change the "but" for a "However, " add "he" before "said" and "didn't", and add the word "Overall" to the start of the next sentence.

• Changed as suggested - that was a case of over correcting myself (I use "however" far too much). Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• "saying about the in-flight [...]" - I feel a word is missing here.

• Copyedited. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review! I'll get to those points once I'm back home tonight after work. Miyagawa (talk) 11:57, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• I think I've addressed everything. Thanks again for reviewing. Miyagawa (talk) 21:53, 23 September 2013 (UTC)

• Good stuff! I am now 105% happy with this article, and am delighted to promote it to GA. Keep up the excellent work! Moswento ^talky 08:50, 24 September 2013 (UTC)