Talk:Godzilla, King of the Monsters!/GA1

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 05:00, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

I'll look at this tomorrow when I am more awake! — GhostRiver 05:00, 26 October 2021 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

• Link "dubbing" here to Dubbing (filmmaking)
• This version dubbed most of the Japanese dialogue into English, altered and removed key plot points and themes, and added new footage with Burr leading and narrating most of the film and interacting with body-doubles and Japanese-American actors in an attempt to make it seem like Burr was part of the original Japanese production. A lot going on in this sentence; can probably be broken into two.

Plot

• Plot clocks in at 577 words, good job
• Delink Tokyo per MOS:OVERLINK
• Pipe "H-bomb" to Thermonuclear weapon
• "fiancé" → "fiancée" since Emiko is a woman
• Spell out "Japan Self-Defense Forces" on first intro and then add (JSDF) in parentheses for future use
• Specify Japanese Navy

Cast

• Good

Production

Crew

• I have never seen a section like this before; usually the crew is woven into the prose
• In any case, rather than having the same reference listed after each person, it might be easier to include a line like "Personnel taken from A Critical History and Filmography of Toho's Godzilla Series", and then have the one citation attached to that sentence (an example of this can be found in most music articles, like the Personnel section of Painting of a Panic Attack)

Development

• No period needed on the quote attribution in the quote box
• The first instance of "Toho" in the body should be linked
• "advertisement materials" → "advertising materials"
• "The contract was forged" → "The contract was signed" (forged here would mean that the crime of forgery took place, which doesn't appear to be the case)
• "were already sold" → "had already been sold"
• Comma after "Godzilla, the Sea Beast"

Filming and dubbing

• "to find key scenes to insert Burr" → "to find key scenes in which Burr could be inserted"
• Most of the phrase "atomic bomb and hydrogen bomb, such as the bombing of Nagasaki, the Bikini Island tests, radioactive contamination of tuna by American and Russian bomb tests" can be linked to the respective pages
• "Tong recorded six voices (older characters) while Hong recorded seven voices (younger characters)." → "Tong recorded voices for six older characters, while Hong recorded for seven younger characters."

Release

Theatrical and box office

• Comma after "April 4, 1956" per MOS:DATECOMMA
• Same deal after "April 27, 1956"
• Link RKO and KHJ-TV
• Comma after "May 29, 1957" per MOS:DATECOMMA

Critical response

• Add an intro sentence to the first paragraph saying something about mixed to positive reviews
• "On review aggregator Rotten Tomatoes"
• "gave the film a bad review, dismissing it with: "'Godzilla', produced in a Japanese studio, is an incredibly awful film"." → "disparaged Godzilla, King of the Monsters, dismissing it as "an incredibly awful film"."
• "alterations, film critic"

Home media

• ""Making of the Godzilla Suit,"" → ""Making of the Godzilla Suit"," per MOS:LQ

Italian re-release

• "and by Cozzi himself"
• "didn't match" → "did not match"
• "Tempera immediately accepted due to his being a fan of Godzilla." → "Tempera, a fan of Godzilla, immediately accepted."

Legacy

• "the character of Godzilla"
• ""Raymond Burr's Steve Martin."" → ""Raymond Burr's Steve Martin"." per MOS:LQ

Sequel

• Link Pentagon to The Pentagon

References

• [7] (Forbes) needs an access date
• [30] (NYT) has a different date format than the other refs
• [38] and [39] are incomplete refs
• SciFi Japan is italicized in [43] and [46] but not in [6]

General comments

• The "Notes" section is currently empty and can be excised
• Photos are fair use or public domain and are all relevant
• No stability concerns in the revision history
• Outside of an obvious mirror site, Earwig score looks good

Putting on hold for now to allow nominator to address comments. Feel free to ping me with questions, and let me know when you're done! — GhostRiver 19:07, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

@GhostRiver: I greatly appreciate you taking time to review the article. I have finished adding all your suggestions. Armegon (talk) 20:16, 27 October 2021 (UTC)

All of my comments have been addressed, passing now! — GhostRiver 04:30, 28 October 2021 (UTC)