Talk:Go Ahead and Break My Heart/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:55, 27 August 2016 (UTC)

GAN review coming soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:55, 27 August 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• from the → for the
• as the second → as its second
• as a digital download → for digital download
• collaboration together → remove "together"
• was handled → was solely handled
• The concept for the song began after the pair shared similar insecurities with each other, leaving Shelton to write the first verse, followed by Stefani analyzing it and writing her own. → A concept can't began; reword it to sound like there were some sessions or such
• who found → with them founding it

• "with them founding it" is grammatically incorrect so I stated "with them finding it" instead

• also appreciated → remove "also"
• on the United States' → remove "the"
• The release → The recording's release
• day, on → remove comma

Background and composition

• The duet → The release of the duet
• notes to → notes of
• expressed the → expressed that the
• Shelton also expressed → He further explained
• second. Shelton described → second, which Shelton described as:
• Try to alternate word using for "duet"
• It is a → It portrays a
• "don't gush about their relationship in the press too much, as they try to keep some semblance of privacy. Instead, they wrote a song about it." → "[didn't] gush about their relationship in the press too much, as they [tried] to keep some semblance of privacy. Instead, they wrote a song about it."
• Stefani sings about her → The lyrics of the recording delve on Stefani's
• the two met → the two artists met

Critical reception

• well received → well-received
• hitsville" and thanking → hitsville", with her thanking
• also thought → remove "also"
• stating Stefani → stating that Stefani
• remove "and concluded by"
• selected the track → selected the recording
• stating "as → stating that

Chart performance

• debut, behind → remove comma
• The song has sold → The track has sold (you repeat "song" twice)
• in the US → in America

Live performances

• sang it again → sang it additionally

Outcome

I've put this article  On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing and best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 18:29, 28 August 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: Thanks. I believe I completed everything. Carbrera (talk) 20:12, 28 August 2016 (UTC)

Gladly passing. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:42, 28 August 2016 (UTC)

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