Talk:Glad (duke)/GA1
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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:20, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
Hi! I will be reviewing this. Adding my comments shortly. Sainsf <^>Feel at home 05:20, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
Lead edit
- around 900, Add "AD"
- Citations generally do not occur in the lead. All facts of the lead are mentioned in the main text and the citations occur only there.
- occupied his duchy What does this mean?
- and Vlachs, or Romanians I am a bit confused by the "and" and the "or"
- Romania is linked twice
- at the beginning of the 11th century "in the early 11th century"?
Background edit
- around 837 Add "AD"
- The Annals of St. Bertin writes that "states that" may be better
- Link "basin"
- Duplink: Byzantine Empire
Banat on the eve of the Hungarian Conquest edit
- Can spear points inhumation graves be linked or explained?
- Duplinks: Mureș River, Carpathian Basin, Bulgars, Moravia, Carolingian Empire, Bulgaria, Florin Curta
- Written sources prove Is "prove" not a bit too strong? Perhaps "imply" or "show"? which also proves that he identified Glad's duchy with the territory that is now known as Banat in the next section is similar.
- Is Franks linked anywhere? It should be linked
- Bavarian Geographer Did I miss the writer?
- Sălăgean and Pop Have they been introduced by their full names?
The conquest of Banat edit
- Glad and his large army waited them You mean "awaited" them?
Glad in modern historiography edit
- only mentioned in the Gesta Hungarorum "mentioned only in the..." looks better
- "Vlad Georgescu" is a duplink.
- anachronism may be linked.
- Does the image have anything to do with this section? Would look better in "Banat on the eve of the Hungarian Conquest".
- Thank you for your review. I fixed the above problems (I hope). Borsoka (talk) 15:52, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
- Hi Borsoka Please wait for a few minutes so that I can point out all the issues. I guess I won't be able to come for a day or two, so possibly we could complete this review today itself! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 16:00, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
- Thank you for your review. I fixed the above problems (I hope). Borsoka (talk) 15:52, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
@Borsoka: I think that should be all. I must praise your awesome narrative, it was a really interesting read! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 16:26, 23 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Sainsf:, thank you for your thorough review and for your kind words. Please find my comments above. Borsoka (talk) 03:56, 24 March 2016 (UTC)
- @Borsoka: Thanks friend. This article is one of the few excellent reads I have come across here. I am glad to promote this. Cheers! Sainsf <^>Feel at home 04:01, 24 March 2016 (UTC)