Talk:Gehenna (Millennium)/GA1
Latest comment: 12 years ago by Gen. Quon in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 03:49, 21 March 2012 (UTC)
Issues:
- Intro: Maybe expand the summary a bit to mention that the people murdered are those who disobey the cult
- Plot: "drug one of their number with LSD" I would say "drug one of their members with LSD"
- Plot: "A private investigative organisation, the Millennium Group, despatch offender profiler Frank Black" change 'dispatch' to 'dispatches'
- Plot: Who/what was the "half-seen monster"? Does it ever say?
- LSD hallucination. I rephrased it to try making this a bit clearer. GRAPPLE X 19:03, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
Those are the only issues I can find. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 16:15, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. I think I've gotten everything, let me know if there's anything else. GRAPPLE X 19:03, 22 March 2012 (UTC)
- No problem. Looks good. Happy to pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 19:43, 22 March 2012 (UTC)