Talk:Gabon at the 2016 Summer Paralympics/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 19:59, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

I'll have a look at this one, should be relatively quick with the review. Kosack (talk) 19:59, 10 October 2018 (UTC)

Initial review

Background

• "He was occupied by his coach Guy Gaétan Ntoutoume Endenda and international classifier Astride Koumba", is occupied the right word in this sentence? Was it meant to be accompanied?

Athletics

• "Edmond Ngombi suffered polio at an early age", should this be "suffered from"? Or even contracted?
• I would add his overall position after his heat as  he's listed as finishing sixth before the following sentence explains the top eight qualify, so it sounds a little odd.
• "Nogmbi was not permitted to advance to the final", could this be reworded? It sounds slightly like he was denied rather than he simplified didn't qualify. Failed to qualify for the final, perhaps? Also his name has a typo in this sentence.

References

• Is there a reason we have two sub-headings here?
  • That was me being blind and not noticing the error. Removed MWright96 (talk) 11:29, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

Overall, nothing major to work on. A few grammar suggestions above and a heading query. Placed on hold for now. Kosack (talk) 05:50, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

• • @Kosack: Thanks for taking on the review. Everything has been sorted. MWright96 (talk) 11:29, 11 October 2018 (UTC)

@MWright96: No further issues, happy to promote. Kosack (talk) 11:57, 11 October 2018 (UTC)