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In the infobox first manga volume is generally mentioned as first appearance. But what chapter, exactly? It need to be mentioned.
The incipit needs an introduction of the Dragons.
Specified. For some reason the chapters don't have titles. (Similar to Watanuki's xxxHolic)
"..she believed that his feelings had deepened". Uhm? What does mean? And it's worth mentioning?
Done.
"He also noted that the X manga was very popular in Japan, and he wanted to meet audience expectations. Suwabe befriended Kamui's actor, Kenichi Suzumura, while recording the anime. Suzumura praised Suwabe's acting, finding him appropriate for the character". Superflous.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 18:40, 30 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
"creating the Sacred Sword which Kyogo hides". Unclear. And the SS needs a brief introduction, with more objective prose, like "a weapon named".
Done.
It's Kyogo or Kyōgo?
Done.
"the first Sacred Sword". Idem, as point 1.
Done.
Generally speaking, the prose is good, but don't be afraid to clarify or explain things. Add sentences, in order to make the prose more fluid and informative.
Done.
"Andy Hanley of UK Anime Network said that Fuma noted that an early scene in the series was a major foreshadowing event which would connect him with Kamui". Superflous. It doesn't say anything about Hanley' reception. Try to formulate a more personal and stricly receptive sentece from the review, IYW.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:22, 30 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
"He grants wishes to the characters with whom he interacts, which often lead to their death or that of a loved one. Fuma, as the Kamui of the Dragons of Earth, can sense the heartfelt wishes of others". Try to invert these sentences. It would be more consequential.
Done.
"As he learns from Kanoe". Who is Kanoe? Sounds like someone who is not worthy to mention, TBH.
"Fūma's". Again. Or Fuma?
Revised.
Revised
Comments and reviews about the manga should, as far as I can say, come first.
Done. The thing is that the manga and the first anime share a similar narrative. The movie is far more different as it came way earlier than the tv series and thus was an autoconclusive story rather than a proper adaptation.
Try to put the Cavallaro' comments and the various analyzes at the beggining of the second Reception paragraph, and general comments about the voice actors and the relationship at the end. Follow a more strict order.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 22:05, 30 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
Done. The only other come from is a Tsubasa cameo where he does not play a major role though but was noted. Do you suggest something else?Tintor2 (talk) 22:40, 30 January 2021 (UTC) @TeenAngels1234:Reply
So, do you want to add another info in Appearances? If this it's encyclopedic, that's OK. Okay. The article looks fine now. I'll read the whole result tomorrow, and, if everything's fine, I'm gonna pass this.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 22:49, 30 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
Pass. Good prose, good images and balanced information.--TeenAngels1234 (talk) 21:22, 31 January 2021 (UTC)Reply
