Talk:French ironclad Vauban

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Hog Farm in topic GA Review

GA Review

edit
GA toolbox
Reviewing
This review is transcluded from Talk:French ironclad Vauban/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 23:14, 19 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Comments

edit

Infobox - The two screw propellors aren't in the main article, so this fact needs a citation somewhere.

"Complement: 440" - Is this a reference to crew (I'm not particularly great with nautical terminology)

  • Yes, though there's also a |ship crew= parameter, which probably makes more sense to use

Is there a reason that the secondary battery of 6 140mm guns not mentioned in the infobox? I'm assuming this is probably because the infobox is designed for primary armament, but just making sure this is intentional.

  • Nope, just an omission - good catch

Service history - Wikilink Toulon.

  • Done

" Rear Admiral O'Neill" - Can we get O'Neill's first name (and a wikilink if one exists) since this is his first mention?

  • No, unfortunately - I dug around old journals to see if I could find his name when I wrote the article and found several references to an Admiral O'Neill, but none of them had his first name - somebody rather helpfully put together the List of admirals of Germany, but we don't have a French counterpart as of yet

Would it be appropriate to wikilink Oran, French Algeria to Oran, Algeria? The geographical context matters some, and the locations of some of these cities aren't widely known in places like North America.

  • Good idea

Wikilink ball bearings.

  • Done

"2nd category of reserve" - Unless this is the official name of the reserve group, second should be spelled out per MOS:NUMERALS

  • This is an official name (or a translation of it, anyway)

"They were retained" - Maybe start out the sentence in a different way so there isn't consecutive sentences beginning with "they".

  • Good idea

Images are all properly tagged and used correctly. Earwig is clean too. Parsecboy, putting this one on hold. Hog Farm (talk) 03:41, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Hog Farm! Parsecboy (talk) 15:47, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply
Passing for GA now. Hog Farm (talk) 16:28, 20 March 2020 (UTC)Reply