Talk:French cruiser D'Assas/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 15:16, 30 May 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• D'Assas passed the next several years uneventfully — This isn't in the body of the article. Is there a source for this, or is it just assumed?
  • Assumed, as the ship did not turn up in any of the contemporary records (or later secondary sources) until her disposal

Design

• The D'Assas class was ordered to as part of the program — Is "ordered to" correct?
  • Fixed
• Red link for armor deck?
  • Done
• Worth mentioning the other members of her class here.
  • Done

Service history

• shipyard Nantes — "shipyard in Nantes"?
  • Good catch
• Mediterranean Squadron — Is the best link available to Commander-in-Chief, Mediterranean (France)?
  • Probably the best option is to use Mediterranean Squadron (France), which redirects to that article currently, but will be turned into an article at some point
• six pre-dreadnought battleships, three armored cruisers, seven other protected cruisers, and several smaller vessels. — Is it worth adding their names, either in a footnote or in parenthesis? Not needed for good-article purposes, but would be nice to have other articles (if/when they exist) to click over to.
  • My thought was that many ship names would really bog down the narrative - that'd be around twenty names that would tilt the balance of the paragraph
• Northern Squadron — Anything to link to?
  • Not at the moment
• two pre-dreadnoughts, four ironclads, four coastal defense ships, two armored cruisers, and one other protected cruiser, along with several smaller vessels. — Same thought as above.
  • Same as above
• to the station — What station?
  • Clarified
• after arriving — Arriving where? The station?
  • Yes - clarified
• D'Assas was struck from the naval register in 1914 — Any word on what happened over the preceding decade?
  • No, unfortunately - D'Assas doesn't show up in any of the fleet tables after 1905, which implies that she was placed in the 2nd category of reserve (the French designation for ships maintained in a state of readiness to allow them to be mobilized in the event of war, but out of commission and with only caretaker crews, similar to the United States Navy reserve fleets - but I don't have a source to confirm that)

References

• Links to the public-domain sources would be nice.
  • Added.

Overall

• Parsecboy, comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 15:41, 30 May 2020 (UTC)
  • Thanks! Parsecboy (talk) 20:27, 12 June 2020 (UTC)
    • Looks good, Parsecboy. Passing now. Regarding all the various ships, I would recommend footnotes naming them; among other things, it means that someone interested in any one of those ships has more things to look at. But that's at your discretion. --Usernameunique (talk) 23:14, 12 June 2020 (UTC)