Talk:Fremantle Gas and Coke Company
Latest comment: 8 years ago by Mitch Ames in topic Lead sentence
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Lead sentence
editRegarding my edit to the lead sentence, and JarrahTree's subsequent change ...
I still think that "a Fremantle, Western Australian based company" is problematic on two counts:
- Linking Fremantle and WA separately is overlinking, per WP:SEAOFBLUE. This can easily be fixed by replacing it with the single link Fremantle, Western Australia, but ...
- "Fremantle, Western Australian based", as a compound modifier is just crying out for a hyphen, but the current wording does not lend itself to easy addition of same.
Possible solutions:
- "... was a Fremantle-based company ..."
- "... was a Western Australian company based in Fremantle ..."
The first is short and simple, but does not explicitly mention WA. If mentioning WA is important, the second is probably the way to go. Mitch Ames (talk) 11:04, 15 December 2015 (UTC)
- Fact. It was based in fremantle (vs the issue of the international medua company known as fremantle media ...) which is in western australia.
so the second version gets both in - do it!! JarrahTree 11:08, 15 December 2015 (UTC)