Talk:Frank Worsley/GA1

Latest comment: 11 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 18:10, 7 June 2013 (UTC)Reply

  • The proper designation of his P-boat was PC.61. PQ was only an informal name.
  • Hyphens in 13-year-old.
  • No "the" on the HMS Sparrow or HMS Pangloss
  • Link torpedo(es), monitor
  • What does this mean? The fortuitous weather on the day of departure from the island meant that he was able to ensure that his chronometer was rated.
  • Take out the hyphen by removing the |adj=on from the template 22-foot (6.7 m)
  • What does this mean? Tugboat? tug steamer
  • What kind of ship was Pangloss?
  • Change skippered to commanded.
  • along British coast "the" coast
  • Add hyphen diesel engined and 15 man
  • typo propellor--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:58, 12 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
  • No DABs, external links good, pics appropriately licensed.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 01:26, 12 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
Many thanks for the review, I think I have addressed all the points noted above. Zawed (talk) 09:24, 12 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
Be sure to use PC.61, the period between them matters. Also you're using the ship's name far too often in close conjunction. I normally use a mixture of the name, "she" and "the ship" in rotation to keep from numbing repetition. And add a hyphen for compound adjectives like "steel hulled".--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:06, 12 June 2013 (UTC)Reply
Revised some more. Hopefully it is satisfactory now. Zawed (talk) 01:22, 13 June 2013 (UTC)Reply