Talk:Final Fantasy Agito/GA1

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Reviewer: IDV (talk · contribs) 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

Taking this on.--IDV^talk 15:06, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

Review

All right. Keep in mind that I have not played any Final Fantasy games (unless you count Mana).

Lead

• There was a day-night cycle tied to the real-world time of day, and includes a social element - switches to present tense, and it is not said what the social element is included with.
• whereby talking with a befriending certain characters - is that "a" supposed to be "and"? Or is one of "talking with" and "befriending" not supposed to be there?
• The game, which acts as a companion to the original game, - is the original game Type-0, or does it refer to something else?
• an alternate cycle of conflict - I don't know what this means.
• The original protagonists - of Type-0? Or some other game?
• Link Hajime Tabata.
• the game had five hundred thousand registered users - is there a reason to not write it as "500,000"?

Gameplay

• sets out on missions across Orience. - might be good to mention what Orience is here. I've already read the rest of the article, but if I hadn't I might have wondered if it was a town, a country, whatever.
• but eventually is soon able to explore - I feel like "eventually" and "soon" aren't both needed - pick one.
• Recurring creatures such as Moogles and Chocobos appear. - okay, so I recognize these names, but you might want to say that they're recurring creatures within the Final Fantasy series. Also, the sentence comes out of nowhere and ends very suddenly - Okay, so Moogles and Chocobos appear, but what are they, in what context do they appear? Maybe tie it together with the next sentence with a colon?
• special control stick - Is this a virtual controller on the screen? Is there anything special about it, because that sounds like the standard way of doing "traditional" button controls on a touch screen.
• The character's bedroom - "The player character's bedroom", or "The Cadet's bedroom".
• The in-game time is also synchronized with real-world time. Like, if you play at night it's night in the game world? It's very sudden and doesn't really elaborate on how it works. Additionally, I don't think the word "also" is needed.
• Might want to link side-quests to Quest (video gaming).
• Successfully completing quests - "Successfully" seems unnecessary, unless it's possible for a quest to be marked as completed without the player succeeding at the task?
• How does the job system work?

Setting and characters

• Noticing that the Cadet is linked here, and not on their first mention.
• Two other crucial characters - Not so sure that we should be calling something "crucial".

Plot

• Explain that the game is split into phases before saying In the First Phase, - the reader doesn't necessarily know this yet.
• What is Tempus Finis? My limited knowledge of Latin-based languages say it's the end of time, which seems to make sense, but please explain it.
• What is a l'Cie?
• Who is Cid?
• The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what gaiden means.

Development

• Explain who Tabata is, and link his name.
• The average English-speaker probably doesn't know what TGS means - write out Tokyo Game Show, and link it.

Release

• Link manga
• Link re-spawn to Spawning (video gaming)

Episode table

• What is the meaning of the "Chapter" in "Chapter (First Phase)"?
• Is it necessary to write the platforms here? The game is only available on iOS and Android, so what other platforms could the release dates be referring to?

Post-release and legacy

• The first hint of a localization appeared when the Agito trademark filed for European territories. When was this?
• Later, at TGS, - Which TGS was this? 2013?

Looks pretty good. Placing this on hold for a week..--IDV^talk 16:12, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

@IDV: I think I've attended to everything you pointed out. I also went through the gameplay section and did some present-to-past tense fixings, as this game is technically gone forever. --ProtoDrake (talk) 17:44, 8 December 2015 (UTC)

@ProtoDrake: Looks good! Passing this now. --IDV^talk 23:58, 8 December 2015 (UTC)