Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page.

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Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment

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  This article is or was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Further details are available on the course page.

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Nice start. Don't forget to add wikilinks to terms which might be unfamiliar to the average reader, or that they might want to know more about. And consider using inline citations. The edit box (i.e., the area where you actually type) has a [Cite] button in the top right corner. If you use that, select the appropriate citation template, and fill it in, you will be able to generate inline citations that not only are linked to your text, but are also easier to maintain, since they're in the same place as the text they support. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:38, 24 November 2014 (UTC)Reply

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I agree that you should use in-text citations as much as possible. I also think you could make more headings and split things up a bit to make the page look a little cleaner and easier to read. I noticed you mentioned a lot of different works that your topic completed, so perhaps you could list these in a separate section. Also, keep an eye on grammar and punctuation. Other than that, it looks like a good start. Just keep up the research and continue to add new information----valerie — Preceding unsigned comment added by Valerie Wittman (talkcontribs) 05:14, 1 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

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Like the person above said you need to create in line citations using reflist where you see fit, so the citations are linked to your references section. You also need a title header for your person as well. I would also consider creating a section devoted to his filmography with wikilinks to his works. -Jimmy — Preceding unsigned comment added by James.Travaglini (talkcontribs) 02:50, 1 December 2014 (UTC)Reply

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Hi, @Fmanzon: I'm providing online support for your course and I had a few comments on your draft:

  • The tense changes a few times throughout, ("he is" vs. "he was").
  • Are there biographical details we can verifiably note? Birth date or year? Etc.
  • The article should be sourced with inline citations for some things, though for an article this short noting the source may be sufficient.
  • Formatting sources can be hard, but I'd recommend trying the "Cite" dropdown menu in your editor. You can plug in the details for a journal pretty quickly and end up with something like:
  • Edwards, A. C. (1968). "The Contributors". Modern Drama. 11 (1): iii–iii. doi:10.1353/mdr.1968.0017.
  • Which is much nicer looking and easier to update as well.
  • You should also move the imdb link to an "External links" section at the bottom (see Janise Yntema for an example using the subject's personal web page). We can't use imdb as a reference for most articles but readers often want to see an imdb page, so we place it at the end in a specific section.

Otherwise with some minor improvements this could be a fine new article. Thanks! Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:40, 1 December 2014 (UTC)Reply