Talk:Feel the Love (Ayumi Hamasaki song)/GA1
Latest comment: 7 years ago by CaliforniaDreamsFan in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:55, 21 September 2016 (UTC)
Initial comments
edit- What is a music card?
- It's a download code card where you can purchase music from (like a CD, but in the form of a card with a code on it.)
- "and lyrically focuses" --> "that lyrically focuses"
- Was it called "Countdown Live" or "Countdown"?
- In the first section, instead of using "Hamasaki" so many times, you could say "the singer"
- "the same track list" --> "the same track listing"
- "To promote the singles same release date" --> "To promote the singles' same release date"
- "beige-coloured dress" --> This article seems to be written in American English, so "coloured" --> "colored"
- "criticised" --> "criticized"
- I don't think the image for the music video is really necessary; what do you think?
- There are in fact three music videos to the single, so differentiating the three with one screen shot would be pretty helpful; plus, it also has the first appearance of DJ Hello Kitty. Any opinions on this, or do you think it should be removed?
- "make-over" --> "makeover"
- "and a stylist" --> "while a stylist"
- "track list" --> "track listing"
- "Music Cards" --> "Music cards"
- Use columns for the "Credits" section; check out "Make Me Like You" for an example
- For the "Remixes history", use "Worldwide" instead of listing all of the countries and combine the two dates together since they are the same
- ON HOLD – Great work; contact me with any question. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 00:15, 29 September 2016 (UTC).
- @Carbrera: Done all adjustments above. Small comments on some of them. CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 04:03, 29 September 2016 (UTC)
- ON HOLD – Great work; contact me with any question. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 00:15, 29 September 2016 (UTC).